Beginner's Love

I shrink away,

Unable to look you in the eye

Never really knowing why I'm afraid

I've known you for years

Eons maybe, sure feels like it

 

But yet here I am

Under the willow tree

Hiding from you just like I always do

You ask me why and I give you a loose answer

But I don't even know why

 

How can I tell you if I don't know?

Impossible, right?

You know me, though

Know me better than myself

And you know exactly why now

 

You take my hand and hold it over your heart

Pull me back to you

Touch my cheek

And look deep into my eyes

That's the exact thing that I need

 

I feel confidence in me

Something that has never happened before

I kiss you and the answer becomes clear as day

Right in front of me all along

I love you, and you love me too

Author's Note

Trying for something different here. Not really sure how it went. Be cruel! I can take it :)

Reviews

[TawnyBlueStar]

aww :D this is really good! I like the last two stanzas :)

[~Lizzy♬]

I don't think there's any cruel criticism I can give you. You're really good at love poetry! :) I really liked it! I can't wait to see more from you like this :)

~Lizzy~

P.S. I will get to your book later today. :)

[Jab]

other than those minor misspellings this poem was amazing!

[luna11]

Wow this poem is amazing. I love it!

[Maryam]

An amazing write. Great job!

[The White Wolf]

This poem has an innocence to it that I like. It reminds me "he loves me, he loves me not" plucked like petals from a flower.

[Destiny Crawford]

How can you be cruel about this? It's truely impossible! :) Great job!

~Destiny

[Rhea752]

GREAT JOB! i love this poem it's a great write

[E. Ryan Miller]

This poem has some excellent thought in it. I like the way the narrator seems to be musing to herself. It makes the poem very personal and peaceful at the same time.
I would advise you to watch your tenses, especially in your first stanza. For instance:
"I shrink away,
Unable to look you in the eye
Never really knew why I'm afraid"
The first two lines are in present tense, and then you have "knew" which is past, and then you jump back into present tense with "I'm". Maybe change "knew" to "know"?
You also have several typos. "Lose" should be "loose", and "No", "know". (I do stuff like that all the time, too...)
Other than that, good job!