The Lying Mask

This was out of frustration and anger of a personal friend.

You act like you own me

Pushing me around like a toy

Fooling me into trusting you

Telling me lies to make me feel sorry for you

For years I fell for your mask, your charade

But no more

 

You had me played pretty good

When we were little you would take me in

And pretend to be my friend

I'm not even sure you meant to do it

Meant to make me be so close to you

I was loyal to you and you treated me like dirt

 

Lies hurt people

That's just fact

And sooner or later people will find the truth

Or at least figure out that you're lying

You would think that there's no point to then?

No, you had to throw away a good thing in the trash

 

I'll tell you what, now

I hope that every time you see my face

Every time you hear my name

People telling you what a good friend I am

And telling you what a stupid, jackass you are

That you are just that

 

So go ahead and try to tell more lies

To try and cover up the old one

It will just make a big mess that you have to clean up

Piss people off because of the deception

Your mask has been split right open

And people are noticing who you really are

 

I have new friends now that have replaced you

They've already been more truthful than you have

You were extremely easy to replace

Once I figured out what you were doing

I walk past you by the corner, with no one near you

Tears falling down your face, and me with all your friends

 

Reviews

[lulu7000]

i think it's good. but as a poem, personally i like to read a poem that has a level of intensity in its words. i.e. an implicit nature.
the unambiguity of the piece makes it too easy on the eyes and to simple in the mind hence the limitation for me to relate and feel any deep, emotional depth with the story you're telling.

the story you are telling is attractive because it is something a lot of people can relate to, i just find that you should explore the depths of your imagination; use language expressively to enhance it's intensity.

no one likes to be lied to, and the prospect of walking away from someone because of deceit is something you could us your words to formulate the true weight surrounding that scenario. stress emotion, stress ideals, stress temperament etc..

[Pikachu]

I really like this.
It's so real.

[rae52]

i know someone who did that to me it was a great poem and the ending of it would have been ideal for me but it didn't happen.

great poem anyway i really enjoyed it keep writing

[Mockingbird]

really evokes the bitterness and hatred you have for this person. i wouldn't let them bother me because having those feelings in your heart would suck the life out of you.
great piece. like a treatise.

[Coyote Poetry]

Liar will get caught sooner or later. When they do. The karma of life will take effect. I like the story in the poem and the very good ending. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[MOON]

Very expressive.

[Rhea752]

amazingly expressive. good job

[Trusting]

I think this title raps it all up. Very nice.

[C4rm3lC0rn]

It reminds me of how things went with my current girlfriend and her X. I'm sure if she read this she could relate to it. Your good at conveying your emotions into words and Id like to hear more from you.