The Beach

A free verse poem that I did for my creative writing class

The Beach

 

Shaded by the skyscraper trees on the edge of the lake

I dip my big toe in the dark blue water

And flinch up the sandy beach

My toe melting in the sand’s warmth

From the brief brush of winter

When it’s the summer season

 

Hamburgers and hotdogs sizzle on the smoky grill

Calling my name with the aroma of lunch

The underside of my feet burn with each step on the sun baked sand

Racing to the wooden picnic tables covered in white cloth

To swipe a plastic plate before my family could take

Them all

 

Rich laughter between people, large and small

Juicy, plump hotdogs bursting in my mouth each bite

Light, joyful conversation jumping from one end to the other

And the sunlight streaming down through the canopy leaves

Warms my heart that I feel

At home here on the lake with

My family

Author's Note

How did I do?

Reviews

[Jamestown]

This piece is so well written, with much imagery and peaceful allure!
Is I continued to read, I felt as if I was there, the descriptions are very clear
and inviting, I love spending time at the lake! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you for your kind words!

[Rounak Jain]

Could make me imagine one f my frends and her beach experience she keeps telling abt.. Good read..

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you for reading :)

[JC]

ah man, this is summer! living by a lake I know these scenes all too well, this has a bright sweetness to it that rings with nostalgia, great job.

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you :)

[Shay]

I really liked this good job

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you!

[Trace]

Made me hungry for the beach, hotdogs and summer
you done just fine.

Trace

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you for your kind review :)

[R. L. Hill]

I love the descriptions you represented. I felt as though I was reading a memory.

[Heromen Selena]

That's good, because it's my memory. :) Thank you for your review. I really appreciate it.

[R. L. Hill]

Of course. You captured the memory wonderfully.

[Leigh]

You did good and created a very feelgood feeling in me. I like the honesty, realism and normality in your words that give a feeling of association, I can relate to the scene you paint, with the strong imagery you have used.

[Heromen Selena]

Yeah I find very complicated and overwritten words hard to read and take away from the true heart of the poem. I'm happy that I made you feel good with my poem. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is beautiful. Always a good day spending time at the beach. The good description create vision of a beautiful place and good food. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you :) I'm really glad you liked my poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful Summer poem. With cold and snow. A day at the beach would be paradise.