Breaking Point

Pushed to my limit
A soft wind is all it takes
To send me over the edge
And take me where ever
I may lay for the rest of time

Pressure compacts me inside
Unable to reach the outside world
Going through my thoughts alone
Making a choice
And then going through with it

I tower over the edge
Poke and prodded to give in
To fall and give up
This is it, the beginning of me
I bend my knees and jump for my life.

Author's Note

I have no idea where this came from. Let me know what you think!

Reviews

[Shay]

wow, that is amazing. the raw emotion inside helps the words flow and seem like they are alive .. good job

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you :)

[schnickythep]

This poem is proof that some of the best writing comes out when you're not forcing it. This is awesome.

[Heromen Selena]

:) Thanks.

[Hachamecha]

It sounds like the moments of someone beforesuicide ^^
It's very nice -w-

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you :) I'm not suicidal.

[Hachamecha]

Ahahaha ^^
Well, it was my thoughts on it aha
I can write about how much rainbows I can sprout but you know :D

[Heromen Selena]

haha! I know I was just letting you know :P

[Persephone]

Very much enjoyed this piece...reminds me of a metaphor of taking a chance in life- that point where you make the decision to let the wind take you, letting go of control.....great work, thanks for sharing :)

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you :)

[quarintine_deathangel]

The imagery and description in this is in depth and gives a picture through the minds eye, thanx for writing ^.^ it's excellent.

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you!

[quarintine_deathangel]

Thanx for the read request XD

[Wolf's Dark Song]

A rather sad poem. The ending almost sounds like suicide or perhaps just giving up under negative pressure. I really like this poem. It must come from a painful place that perhaps you are not yet aware off. The pressure of life can send a person into the dark places within. The challenge is to be strong and find one's way out. This is what I took away from reading you really good well written poem. It flows naturally when read.

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you :)

[rivers]

Not knowing where it came from is not a bad thing...What I do know is that I too have been to this place, actually often. In the last stanza the end is the new beginning as the realization that motion is new moments and optimistic possibilities.

You got my attention...

[Heromen Selena]

Thanks! I try my best.

[Helen Crutchett]

Wonderful poem, a sort of stream of conscience write, but also it had a depth to it. Meaning shone through this and the last two stanza's seemed to be a resolve of some sort, to leave the past where it belongs and jump into the next stage, that I'm sure is going to be a new you! Good work!

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you so much :)

[Helen Crutchett]

You are very welcome!

[Sarah Hobbit]

This a sad poem, but beautifully put.
Good job
Sarah :-)

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you :)

[Rhea752]

amazing flow and very inspiring!! keep it up :D

[Heromen Selena]

Thank you!