Patience and Grace

Just trying to branch the genre out,,, the format is out of the norm a little for me. Tell me what you think.

Sweet, sweet one
Have patience please
Take it easy and be free, I am always here to talk to
I will love you like I ought to

Sweet child,
My glowing pride for your presence are the reflections of you
Your lovable smile, your honest truth
Even your anger, for it shows the fight in you

Don't miss me when I am missing, for I will miss you
My prayers to the heavens will send ghosts to whisper my love
My love, my love is what you are
If you need me near just ask, I will wipe away tears or share laughs, I will hug, I will smile and work my heart out to see you past
Because when you shine, it is my attention you grasp.

Author's Note

Just fixed spelling errors...

Reviews

[Shadows of Sight]

Ooooo, this was wonderfull! Like a father speaking to a daughter, his pride and joy!
I like the form to, reminds me of steps rising higher into the heart of your love.

One little opps though..."Prayers" not "Preyers"

I loved it Matthius!
Keep exploring this each and every new aspect of your inner self!

[Bluet_Belle]

This write is wonderful, the structure is great, the flow of it is perfect, in my opinion, and the message is outstanding. You have such a way with showing us, the readers, exactly how you feel. You reveal your self to us willingly and succinctly. You are beautiful, absolutely beautiful, Matweh.


"Because when you shine, it is my attention you grasp."

That makes me smile:P Because ravens like shiney things...

[Carole]

I love this, Matthew. It reminds me of God speaking to a child...Glad you shared this. :-)

[Kathleen Marie]

So very lovely and so full of love. I love this line, "My glowing pride for your presence are the reflections of you". We so often see ourself in the ones we love. Beautiful written from a heart that knows love.

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Spell Chek Alert!

Stanza 1, last line: "too" = "to"
Stanza 3, line 2: "preyers" = "prayers"

We all do it from time to time! If you catch my goofs, please let me know!

"Your lovable smile, your honest truth
Even your anger, for it shows the fight in you"

Great lines! You have to like that spunk!

This is a wonderful tribute. It shows warmth and affection in a very caring fashion. I like the change of format, but I liked the older stuff as well. Keep it up!

-Gabe

[E. M. Murren]

This is a lovely message of unconditional love. I like the format, however, I am just getting to know your writing. I like this a lot. Fine work.

[Rhiannon Dragonraine]

Such a wonderful tribute to a beloved child- this is so heartfelt and rings so true. I was touched as I read this and it just moved me- Wonderful!

[Amor-de-angel]

It kind of reads like a prayer.(hint for the typo)
Has a very calming feel to it.
Nice work.

[Amanda]

oh god, matt this was really good! the insight was flowing and it felt like you were talking directly to the reader or someone special.

it was building and beautiful...and quite touching.

loved it...and you.

t a, mandy