Revisiting the Past

After all the commotion died down and the scientists went in the other room. Zoe thought it would be safe to talk. "Claire i'm so sorry I didn't mean too i mean I didn't know.." Zoe's words were stumbling out her mouth. "Don't worry I guess it's time to know the truth. My real name is Claire Angela Marina. The tablets I was taking kept me...human." Claire's voice turned into a whisper afraid of what Zoe's reaction would be.  Silence loomed the atmosphere. "So you really are a mermaid?!" Zoe squealed. Claire looked at her astonished, "yes." Claire felt more comftorbale now knowing that Zoe wasn't going to desert her in her time of need. "I know how you popped a tail, i'm guessing you tried one of my tablets?" Claire looked at supiciously at Zoe. "Cause if a human swallows one of my tablets if they touch water than they get a tail." Zoe's face filled with guilt. "It's the same with me except they give me legs but it only lasts for 24hrs thats why i keep taking them." Zoe looked at Claire in awe. "So that's why you'd always rush off somewhere everytime you got wet."
"Yeah! Back to my story back home my parents are emperor and emperess and have been for the last 300yrs my familys generation that is, not my parents. So the town thinks our family's doing a great job and they want me to be empress but of course you need a emperor." Zoe's face turned into frustration.
"What! How old are  you 14 - 15! They can't do that! That's against the law!" Zoe mangaged to say whilst her face turned a dark shade of red. "We're under the sea and it's part of our culture." Claire correcterd her. "Well whose the hottie you're engaged with." Zoe didn't seem to notice the tears in Claires eyes obviously because they were underwater. "No one, I swam away before they could match make me." Claire said with depressed face.
"Hey! Didn't you say these tablets only last for 24hrs?" Zoe's face had colour in it and her eyes shined brightly. "Yeah why?" Claire's curiousity increased.
"Well if I fell in at 10:30 and i've been here overnight than why am i not human?" Silence was heard for at least 10 mins while Zoe and Claire pondered on this theory.
"I'll tell you why." The two girls spun round to face a smug looking doctor. Zoe and Claire were not impressed. "Well, go on." Zoe taunted. "Why am, I mean we still mermaids?"
"Well the tablets we studied showed that if humans take not even a whole one if they ever touch water than they'll turn into a mermaid." The Doctor replied happy with herself.
"Look can't you let us go please!?" Zoe begged.
"Why would I want to that when I could be biolgist of the year, of the century, my name would be praised everytime it was heard." Dr. Washington went on.
"Yeah but the authorities will find out about you keeping you us here!" Claire added hastily.
"Puh-lease the government will praise me for keeping you freaks locked up in here."  Dr. Washington added. "Now if you don't mind we need to experiment on Claire to see if there are any simliralites or differences between a real mermaid or a human thats turned into one." Claire was shocked.
"You are definitley not going to touch me." Claire screamed.
"Drain the tank." Was all the words that came out of the Doctors mouth. Claire and Zoe looked at each other confused but understood the phrase as soon as the water they were swimming in was disappering. "Zoe, help!" Claire panted as she furiously kicked her tail on the bottom of the tank.
"Now don't worry Claire we'll give you something to ease the pain." The Doctor told Claire calmly as they strapped her down to the gurney. "Refill the tank." The Doctor looked at Zoe compassionately " Zoe we're trying to help you remember that." Zoe watched Claire being wheeled off down the corridor strapped to a gurney as the tank filled with water.

Reviews

[LaineyBeetle]

You started out really well but this story is beginning to lose steam :( I'm a little bit sad because I had high hopes. I will read on further but it is more about the fact that I have committed to the last few chapters and I might as well finish the story. I hope it picks up at the end. You had such a great concept and wonderful ideas. I'm just not sure about the match making thing and the evil adoptive parent thing. It is starting to sound a bit like a fantastical episode of passions or days of our lives :/ Being shot with darts and strapped down tightly sounds a little violent too for children. You may want to rethink that part and make it a bit tamer?