The Accident

The next day Zoe woke up too see if the colour of the vitamin tablet made any difference but it did  nothing. "Claire's just a worry wart." Zoe said to herself. Then she looked at the clock 9:30... 9:30 she was meant to be meeting Claire at 10! Zoe hadn't even had her breakfast and with theat she crammed a couple of pieces of toast in her mouth, when she was about ready she heard a car horn; 
'Beep! Beep!' 
Claire was here, Zoe rushed into the lounge room to get her bag when she heard "I wouldn't go if I was you." Zoe looked around there was no one around. She didn't have time to solve mysteries.

"Hi Mrs. Tones, thanks for driving me today." Zoe chirped.
"That's alright Zoe," Claire's mum replied. It only took five minutes to get to the dock. 
"See ya at one mum." Claire waved back.
"Yeah, whatever." Claire's mum never liked her in fact it was Claire's dad who wanted her.

"Good morning passengers and welcome aboard the Sydney Fleet. Today we have a very special guest onboard Dr. Ceclia Washington. She's a marine biologist, so please say hello if you see her around." The message echoed throughout the ship. "Are you freaked out yet?" Zoe asked. 
"No we're not even outside yet!" Claire managed to get out through giggles. So with that Zoe and Claire headed out onto the deck. Not many people were on the ferry so they could go right up to the front. "Still not freaked out yet?" Zoe asked stepping closer to the edge. 
"Nope." Claire said stepping back looking worried. 
"Watch Out!"
Zoe turned around to se a kid sprinting backwards towards her..."STOP!" But it was too late the kid pushed Zoe over the edge and into the water. "Claire!" Claire looked down to find her friend hanging on to a thin piece of rope. "Zoe take my hand!" Claire pleaded. Zoe's face became worried as she struggled to take Claire's hand. "Claire!" Zoe's scream could be heard throguhout the boat and a splashed soon followed. "Zo! Stop the boat!" Claire pleaded.

           

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[LaineyBeetle]

Wouldn't "Zo, stop the boat!" come AFTER the scream? It is hard to imagine she had time to realise she was going over board and call her friend to stop the boat before she decided to scream and before she hit the water? Wouldn't the first reaction be the scream and then a call for help? Again, this needs a little work but the story is interesting enough to make me want to keep reading on :)