Eternity's Plight

I walk through
corridors of grey
As the light bleeds
from the sky
And the night
steals the day

I move alone
through shadows unseen
An ethereal creature
A heavenly being

I drift through the world
loved yet despised
Twisted and tormented
with no alibi

I hunger for something
I will never find
Because the truth is an alien
And the inhabitants are blind

I wander through worlds
of colour and light
Of mysteries unspoken
and eternity's plight

I am everything
and nothing
I am all that I am
I am free to be me
I belong to no man

Reviews

[Carthage Thorne| The Wi..]

This poem is absolutely brilliant! It's freeing, and it is something to get one thinking on levels that go just beyond the surface. That final stanza is wonderful, my favorite two lines from that is...

I am all that I am
I am free to be me

Unfortunately too many people do not even have an understanding of that, of themselves in that manner which is a sad thing to think about but inspiring to know those who are able to say that they are "Free to be themselves."


Overall, nicely written and look forward to seeing more of your finished pieces and pieces yet to come.

~Carthage Thorne

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you Carthage. I’m glad you like it

[Serendipity Planet]

Powerful and beautiful poetry
I am glad you let me into your journey to be free
I felt you strongly here

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you John I appreciate it

[emipoemi]

..........Wow! A gem of a poem that culminates with a resounding bang! What a finish! And it flows well with fantastic imagery. I'm not sure if I understand "truth is an alien/and the inhabitants blind".....to me, comparing it to the rest of the poem, it doesn't quite make much sense, much less with each other, for aliens don't have inhabitants, but rather are such and they inhabit a planet. Perhaps that small section needs to be looked at. This is otherwise brilliant! Well done!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you. Maybe think on it a bit, it has a hidden meaning, maybe you won't get it but I know exactly what I mean and that's all that counts. After all poetry is subjective.

[emipoemi]

Hidden meanings are good, but without some hints as to what you mean, the readers become more focused on figuring out what you could possibly mean by such cryptic imagery. Poetry may be subjective to a certain extent, but you can only go so far into that subjectivity before you lose the interest of the reader(s) due to utter confusion. You would have to meet them halfway for not everybody saw what you saw or experienced what you experienced. And what I'm saying is there is no hint (doesn't have to be completely spelled out....it's just a hint) that really connects "inhabitants" with anything else, much less with "truth" or "alien" which are the go-to words with which readers would attempt to connect it. It may be crystal clear to you, but to any reading this it's not. And I can almost guarantee that no matter how many times I read this, "inhabitants" is going to stump me every time. Perhaps it's the wording. I don't know. And for what it's worth, this factor is the only thing that really mars the poem in some way. And because the rest of the poem is so well done, people merely choose to disregard it, just because, but I'm saying the poem would be perfect were this small factor made a bit more clearer. (You're not just writing for yourself if you intend that others read your work....you need to really be careful how you paint your picture so that you can maintain your "subjectivity", but also allow everyone else to see where you're coming from).

[Carolann Dowsett]

Honestly it's not that hard to figure out. It's all good if you don't get it but your the only person so far who hasn't. So all good.

[Re-Pete]

Yes this is very deep. For me, it speaks of longing to know what awaits us in eternity. It starts out dark, trapped in our lowly human condition. Then it ponders that there could be something better. But maybe there isn't and this is all there is. It ends with we are what we are and the writer is ok because at least she is free now and beholden to no man. It's very back and forth and pensive in wondering. An excellent poem.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks so much. Glad it spoke to you

[Inject Positivity]

Revelation through past experience to a world of self realization... This is a very thought provoking write, with a discovery of one's true self through powerful words and imagery... I enjoyed structure of the poem as it is done with less words to create more impact on the reader's mind... Very well done...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Adam M. Snow]

"I walk through
corridors of grey
As the light bleeds
from the sky
And the night
steals the day"

This line drew me in. This is an awesome poem.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed

[Phantom Heart]

I love it. I am blown away by all of its powerful wording. There are just so many things for me to reread and love.
"I hunger for something
I will never find
Because the truth is an alien
And the inhabitants are blind "

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks heaps Morgan I'm glad you 'got' that

[Phantom Heart]

You're very welcome! I really do think that there is so much you have written but with minimal words and I really think that you did a wonderful job.

[dillonjensen]

Beautiful piece. Maybe this describes the current journey that you're on in your own life, or that you have come to this realization through experience in the past. Whatever the case may be, I really enjoyed this.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you im glad you enjoyed :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Great write from Carolann, with strength and pride she writes in a Plathian way about her inner life. Carolann impresses here with literary skill and personal courage...excellent.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks so much Leslie. What a lovely review. You made me smile

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

God gave us all the gift of Freewill when we were born, if we choose to give it to others or let others take it from us is our choice alone.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Give it to God He knows best