Waiting For Eternity

I walk along
cobblestones of grey
As the light bleeds from the sky
and the night steals the day

Alone I wander
through an unearthly maze
Jumbled thoughts blind me
my mind is a haze

Fog envelopes
my fragile soul
Seeps into my veins
until I am deathly cold

I'm lost in the darkness
with no escape
All hope disappears
as I sit and wait

Wait for the day
that my freedom will come
When the darkness will melt
in the light of the Son

When joy will replace
the pain in my heart
When this life is over
and eternity starts

Reviews

[Michael Thrower]

That was awesome. The stanza:

"Wait for the day
that my freedom will come
When the darkness will melt
in the light of the Son "

Just kicked me awake instantly and I saw what this was meant to say. I admire it a lot and it makes me wonder how personal this is to you. It's personal to me and a lot of my writing goes around the same lines that this has shown. Very good write and very beautiful. It's the light that shines in darkness.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks Michael. Yes it's very personal to me too.

[junaid altaf]

a simple plea in a lucid way....

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you that's great

[junaid altaf]

your welcome

[Jack...]

Carolann, this is sadly beautiful. Life is a long journey, filled with many pot holes and detours, but aslo filled with beautiful flowers and warm days. Indeed, the journey does end on earth and re-begin in a far better place. But we have to enjoy what we have and where we are the best that we can as walk through each day.

Very nicely done my sweet friend.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes very true Jack. Thank you

[Sami Khalil]

A contrast between your dark life now and your hope for eternity . A splendid read and write...:)..............

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks Sami, I'm not anyways completely lost :)

[Sami Khalil]

OK. You are welcome...:).....................................

[Frieda P]

A foreboding read, darkly passages yearning for a safe place to land, you've painted this deathly cold feeling of the heart with broad strokes Carolann, very affecting.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks Frieda I'm glad you felt it

[Frieda P]

Let's say it reverberated in my bones Carolann, always a pleasure....

[Carolann Dowsett]

That I like :) thank you Frieda

[Night]

I had to read this several times...it's that good. You must have dug down deep to write this one....I find this write very beautiful in it's content.....this has to be one of, if not, your best one yet. Amazingly moving......=)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks David that means a lot, I was beginning to lose confidence in my writing.

[Night]

Inspired by life and the Spirit that lives within you....this is what writing is all about my friend....and you do it very well.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes very true