The Fray

I'm sad today 
my lights gone away 
and I may never find it again 

The words that you say
when I dare to disobey
leave me in an ocean of pain

You blame me 
for all the things 
that don't seem to  go your way 

You want to die 
you scream and cry 
but I know it's a game that you play 

You manipulate 
with your spite filled words 
place guilt upon everyone else 

Never once thinking 
that it just might be you
who's stirring the fires of hell 

Do you even care 
about the damage you do
when your ripping my heart to shreds

Do you think of the pain
and destruction you cause
when your lying at night in your bed

Or do you rejoice in the suffering 
and despair you inflict 
on those who don't do as you say 

Enjoying the conflict
the buzz that you get 
when you're in the middle of the fray 

Reviews

[Ees]

In the second line there should be an apostrophe before the s of lights. as in your light(has) gone away. I believe.

Great descriptive work. Can clearly see this manipulative person who is the subject of this work!

very easy to read and understand and recognize. Wonderful work. Great job!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Steve Downen]

I agree regarding the apostrophe. It will enhance the rhythm.

[minisla]

Sounds like a person not worth knowing for the disrespect shown. Gets of on the suffering caused to someone who cares just to probably ease his suffering. A mere child A bully.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes I agree. Thank you :)

[Matt]

Sounds like a horrible person who would rejoice in suffering. In some ways I can relate to this a lot. Another great piece of work from you. Well done!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks so much

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. I like the word "fray". I like how you brought me into the thoughts and struggle with strong description. No weakness in the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much.

[Steve Downen]

This poem is being shelved in my library for sure. I love how eclectic your rhyme scheme is. It definitely fits with the theme of the poem too. Great poem!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks so much

[Devanshu Rajput]

good rhymes.....should say that this piece was much better than your previous piece that i reviewed.....

[Carolann Dowsett]

Ok thanks

[Overrated-World]

Good write. Your poetry shows great emotions and i love it :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[KeeD]

To torment is bread and butter for a few miserable souls, they don't understand they have pointless goals. Hurt and harm is all they'll ever be good for and at the end of the day all they truly are is pathetic and alone. great write miss carolann

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you Kee :)

[kelvin]

Yes the people we care about sometimes can bring a load of harm to our hearts, yet some gets a feeling of high breaking down others spirits. manipulating others on their kindness for they know and don't seem to care what they're doing to the other. Nice read here in describing the phases some of us go through or the treatment from a loved one dictating the heart. As always keep writing fellow writer. Nice read again

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much I'm glad you enjoyed.

[kelvin]

you're very welcome

[Salar Majak]

Never once thinking
that it just might be you
who's stirring the fires of hell


wow!!!! really really fantastic!
i'm in love with how this poem is ryhmed!!!
great job

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks so much Sal.

[Salar Majak]

:)