Love and Pain

What do you do when

love and pain

become interwoven

in a deadly game 

When words get spoken 
hearts are broken 
and dreams get washed away 
in the pouring rain

I allowed my heart to love
now my tears are a flood 
For a moment in time 
hope and joy
played tag with my mind 
But now I sit in confusion 
feel like I'm losing 

Lost in the midst of chaos 
where nothing makes sense 
and no one seems real 
Why did I feel
Why did I try 
I should have stayed hiding
away from the eyes
of those who can hurt 
with words full of curse

Reviews

[Matt]

I like this as usual with your work. I think that sometimes we go through things we think we should have control over but we don't, and if we manage to pray for and own the strength to make it we can come out better off, and in the event help others grow as we do ourselves. Sometimes we don't understand completely the things that happen until a long time afterward. I know this is the case with me.
Your work really does inspire me. Thank you so much for sharing with me.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow thanks so much and yes I agree with you.

[Overrated-World]

Good write :) tells a story.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Levi Levin]

I share past sorrow like this also. My heart's sympathy unto you I do send and what time has produced, time will also mend.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes thank you so much.

[Levi Levin]

Your welcome.

[jamal]

Great poem :) beautiful emotions in this write! thank you for sharing!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Jack...]

The heart is so very fragile, it will break easily if not tneded to, iy may even shatter itno a thousand tiny pieces, but never fear, for there is one who can mend it regardless of how many pieces are cast...keep your eyes and arms open and you will find your joy.

Nice Carolann.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks so much Jack.

[Chaos_Collector]

The first stanza of this poem is a nice attention grabber posing a good question "What do you do when
love and pain
become interwoven
in a deadly game" There definitely a nice flow and rhythm that is sustained throughout this poem and I like it. I've noticed that even in your piece that don't rhyme, you manage to catch the reader with your masterpieces. I love the last stanza especially "Lost in the mist of chaos
where nothing makes sense
and no one seems real
Why did I feel
Why did I try
I should have stayed hiding
away from the eyes
of those who can hurt
with words full of curse" Reason being that I can relate to it and it has a catchy rhythm that's sure to reverberate in the reader's head. Excellent work Carolann

Chaos_Collector

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much means a lot.

[Chaos_Collector]

You're very welcome. It was a pleasure reading

[quinfinn]

when we wander onto open ground we risk the perils of being unsheltered. it is, sadly, a damned if you do and damned if you don't scenario. i like the way this began but the format changed halfway through, and, although the wording was still pertinent and gorgeous, it lost some of the momentum because of the change. it is a wonderful piece of prose, however.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you

[Emerald Seas]

The loss of love and the value it brings to every other aspect in life is tragic. I felt the depth of pain and sorrow in this writing, a truly gripping read.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much means a lot.

[David Scott]

I felt the emotion with your word choice, but the construction of the write did not add much for me... This was more of a flat statement to me than an artistic melding of words into a work of poetic expression. Just ok for me this time dear.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Ok thank you

[Frieda P]

Always a dilemma, do we risk the pain of hurt and rejection or stay safely in our own little cocoons? Nicely said, although much sadness in this read.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks Frieda and yes so true.

[Inda]

Really nice, full of inner turmoil; as for pain intertwined with love,
Thats almost always the case. Good one!

[Carolann Dowsett]

True :-) thank you