When words get spoken hearts are broken and dreams get washed away in the pouring rain
I allowed my heart to love now my tears are a flood For a moment in time hope and joy played tag with my mind But now I sit in confusion feel like I'm losing
Lost in the midst of chaos where nothing makes sense and no one seems real Why did I feel Why did I try I should have stayed hiding away from the eyes of those who can hurt with words full of curse
I like this as usual with your work. I think that sometimes we go through things we think we should have control over but we don't, and if we manage to pray for and own the strength to make it we can come out better off, and in the event help others grow as we do ourselves. Sometimes we don't understand completely the things that happen until a long time afterward. I know this is the case with me.
Your work really does inspire me. Thank you so much for sharing with me.
I like this as usual with your work. I think that sometimes we go through things we think we should have control over but we don't, and if we manage to pray for and own the strength to make it we can come out better off, and in the event help others grow as we do ourselves. Sometimes we don't understand completely the things that happen until a long time afterward. I know this is the case with me.
Your work really does inspire me. Thank you so much for sharing with me.
A powerful poem. When love and pain are one. Only a dead-end road is the destine journey. The good description brought to life the pain and chaos in the poem. I like the ending. Would be nice to be able to hide from the pain and the curse. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
' .. Lost in the midst of chaos ~ where nothing makes sense ~ and no one seems real ~ Why did I feel .. .. '
Firstly a (Carolann) because sometimes we all need a hug.
And secondly, thoughts: guess we have choices in life. We either live in cells and avoid any emotions for another being, or we go through the tenuous steps of finding a special someone, someone to be loved, trusted, given to, received from, Dear lord, the hurt that goes with the search is as painful as you so sadly describe above, but.. but .. but.. when it happens space is a living, dancing kingdom!
Nice rhyming! Though, the ending seemed kind of abrupt. Like it's not a finished piece. I feel like you could add so much more to this. It's a great poem already, but I think adding more, or rewording the ending would make it marvelous-er!
But that's just my opinion, and it's totally your decision! :)
I can't even say I relate to this because I think you just explained the reasons behind my writings more so than I ever could. This piece was really good, such simple words but it conveyed such a strong message. I really enjoyed it!!!
"Lost in the mist of chaos" I believe you meant for 'mist' to be 'midst', but I could be wrong. I loved this piece carolann and the pain woven into each word. I know love can sometimes be a long and painful journey, but someday it will find you!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thanks so much yes I did mean midst ill fix it :) I'm glad you liked it means a lt.
I am Vulnerable
Broken
Strong and Fearless
I am all things to all people
Yet I belong to none
I am Elusive
Unknown
A whisper of things to come
I am a Warrior
In an endless war
Victori.. more..