Alive

Listen                                                                                                 

can you hear                   

the sound of silence          

is deafening to my ears

 

Look                                

can you see me               

I am real                             

flesh and blood            

tears and sorrow                                          

laughter and joy

 

Not just a figment        

of your imagination                                           

a fantasy 

to your mind

 

Touch me                      

can you feel me                  

I am solid                          

living                                                  

breathing                                                      

alive

 

A warrior                        

strong                         

fearless                  

emotional                      

broken

 

Moving through the light                      

between worlds unseen

Drifting through lands

of myriad dreams

 

Close your eyes

and follow me

Let go of the physical

embrace the spiritual

 

 

Reviews

[chandlerl]

oooo....I like this one. It was really powerful. Adamant.

Look

'can you see me

I am real

flesh and blood

tears and sorrow

laughter and joy'

This would be really beautiful read aloud.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks so much

[Inda]

Left me wanting more; in a good way. :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you Inda, that's great :)

[Chaos_Collector]

I'd recommend adding full stops and commas so the reader knows when to pause throughout the poem. On the flip side of things, you've got some excellent diction in this poem. The first stanza makes for a powerful opening to draw in the reader and the ending is heartfelt as well. Well done :)

Chaos_Collector

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you for your review though I never use full stops and commas they annoy me lol

[Chaos_Collector]

Lolol theres a first. Well if you omit the full stops and commas thing then you've done a great job.

Chaos_Collector

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :) I do use them in my novel though lol and you will see that a lot of the writers on here don't use them either I'm not on my own in my madness :)

[Chaos_Collector]

Lol ah okay. I guess I have a lot of people to chew out then, don't I :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

:-)

[icelandicblue]

The duality of existence is certainly a wonderful topic that you have done justice to.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice short punchy verses. Great Job Carolann

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks Ricochet.

[KeeD]

Whenever I read the word warrior, I always think about you. I don't know why, after I read your about me, the word just stuck for me, it always reflects you and to me it's beautiful.
Let go of the physical
embrace the spiritual - Amen to that :) beautiful piece. Favorited.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thannk you Kee :)

[Whiskurz]

You write with a Masterful pen my friend.....Whisk

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[lee von cleef]

the rhythm made me,kept me,the embrace,a dream in morning mist tiptoeing around the barriers of risk.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Frieda P]

What I enjoy most about your poetry, is I always 'feel' it...and that in my book is expertise.

'Let go of the physical
embrace the spiritual'

A beautiful landing. Brava my friend.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you Frieda that's so awesome :)

[Frieda P]

You know the pleasure is always mine. ;-)

[Carolann Dowsett]

:)

[Jack...]

As if a dream becomes reality, this poem is a beautiful dream that I found i was able to touch this early morning.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you Jack glad it touched you :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A sensitive journey using the words to bring the reader into the emotion of the poem. I like the way you led the reader into personal thoughts and the strong ending.
"Close your eyes
and follow me
Let go of the physical
embrace the spiritual"
Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you glad you enjoyed :)