You're Gonna Get Burnt

Silence filled my mouth 
but I spat it out 
Like it was something 
filthy and vile 

You tried to render me speechless 
but instead I rendered you sightless
Blinded you to the feelings 
of my wounded heart 

You played the game so well 
but I just looked on in amusement 
I've seen all the games before 
they don't impress me any more 

I look weak 
but inside I'm strong 
Even in brokenness 
I'm a force to be reckoned with 

Your promises mean nothing 
to me they are just lies 
dripping from lips 
that are nice to kiss 
but that's about all 

Do you think that you fool me 
with your crocodile smile 
and your smarmy moves 
that charm all the girls 

My heart is locked away 
in a golden box 
behind a thousand walls 
built lovingly 
by my broken soul 

So play your games 
they mean nothing to me 
I know every trick
in your dirty book of deceit

Your motives aren't pure 
you're not looking for love 
You just like what you see 
but I'm not that dumb 

You see
I've been through the wars 
been  left  bleeding on the floor 
Battered and bruised 
after too much abuse 

So if you wanna get off 
go pick on somebody else 
cause if you mess with me babe 
you're gonna get burnt 

 

Reviews

[chandlerl]

There were some beautifully written parts to this poem, the poem itself is a lovely piece of art.

The only part that didn't flow right while reading it was the word brokenness in stanza 4, line 3.

Overall though, it was...fantastic.
This part gave me goose bumps:

"My heart is locked away
in a golden box
behind a thousand walls
built lovingly
by my broken soul"

This part has a lot of meaning to it, it certainly creates a splinter for the mind.
Your heart is locked in a gold box, which means it's truly valued at it's highest worth for you, (which it should be, of course) but it's also behind a thousand walls which ...would be a daunting task for anyone to get through. Then there's the built 'lovingly' by my 'broken soul', which for me translated to although broken or however much in pain you are (which I'm sure relates to the walls part) in there is still the hope of compassion and willingness to love.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow thank you I'm glad you saw that in it.

[chandlerl]

As always, breaking down your writing tells a lot about the person, no matter how much they themselves try to conceal.
And this one says that you are a beautiful strong person.
=)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :-)

[Baby Ricochet]

Love it! Great Job Carolann

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[The Nameless]

Great to read some of your poetry again =D

Like the whole independence thing and the descriptions are good.

"Silence filled my mouth
but I spat it out" - what a great start to a great poem

enjoyed reading =D

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[MOON]

Lyrical write poignant , lovely word choice, love the seventh stanza particularly.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Frieda P]

Go you. This has so much impact and power to it, like the brave new woman with moxy plus attitude! Good read, think we've all been there, you got your point across with a really swanky poem..you've got style Carolann!....Nice!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you Frieda, I could say the same about you :)

[Frieda P]

;-D ...and my pleasure, always.

[Frieda P]

Okay my OCD has gotten the best of me, fix the title please.

'you're' ;-) what can I say, I'm anal retentive...

[Carolann Dowsett]

Haha now how did I miss that :-P What would I do without you Frieda :)

[Frieda P]

ha you're lucky LA wasn't around, she already called me out on a misspelled word today. ;-) It's a shame for such a lovely piece to have a mistake like that, s**t happens. ;-P

[Carolann Dowsett]

Ahh yeah that's just my overworked brain lol

[Frieda P]

Better overworked, than under right? lol

[Carolann Dowsett]

True :)