Vanish

I hate feeling like this 
so hurt and in pain 
As if nothing that matters
will ever be the same 

The lights gone out 
of my fragile soul 
The darkness has moved in 
taken over control 

I wish I could sleep 
for a thousand years 
Then wake up in heaven 
where there are no tears 

I wish I could fly 
away from this life 
Set my heart free 
let my spirit take flight 

I want to disappear 
Into the darkest void 
From the cruel hearts of man 
where I can't be destroyed

Just vanish from sight

and be no more

But I have to stay

for the ones I adore

 

Reviews

[Devanshu Rajput]

the emotions were flowing from the poem...i know that no hell would be cruel than earth...you are a great writer...the piece was excellently excellent...wonderfully wonderful...and fantasticly fantastic...lovely piece...wonderful read...greatly written...keep writing like this...:-)

DEVANSHU RAJPUT

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much!

[Wpww!!!]

can someone read some of mine!!! pleaze

[Carolann Dowsett]

Later today i will when I've finished my work :)

[Jessie]

Carolann... This is beautifully sad!!
I know that feel.... I can totally relate! Great write xo!!!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much Jessie.

[Tate Morgan]

We arent ready for you to leave yet.There are so many things you might do with this life yet.Your friends like you. We want you to get happy

[Carolann Dowsett]

Awww thank you so much, that's very sweet of you. :)

[zainul]

A true emotion expressed very eloquently through this wonderfully rhymed poem.
Love each lines.
"The best stanza for me is:
I want to disappear
Into the darkest void
From the cruel hearts of man
where I can't be destroyed"

Congratulations!!!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much. :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Last lines is true. I wish to escape to a different place. For the people that need me I must maintain. I like the thoughts and the the strong ending. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is quite sad and i understand the feeling...i have been there...my girlfriend and i were just talking about this the other night...how close both of us came at times...

but something brings us back from the edge each time...

maybe it is the thought of those we leave behind...yet often our thoughts are that they would all be better off.
gut wrenching write...

your phrasing feels done with such ease.

was reading your bio...and it reminded me of an Alanis Morisette song.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Oh cool thank you so much, not sure I know the song? Im glad this resonated with you.

[Vee Kay]

Great Poem. You're like the Top-notch writer of all time!!!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Oh I wouldn't say that there is so much talent on here it blows my mind. But thank you so much. :)

[Relic]

Writing allows us to share our feelings with others whether the words are happy or sad. You draw the reader into this one with just the right length to create thoughts we can empathize with. Life can be really sad and challenging at times. Nice writing.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much.

[Relic]

:)

[Emerald Seas]

Without the sadness, would we realize how tender and wonderful the good moments are in life? This is heart-wrenching and strong. Sticking around for loved ones - sometimes that is enough to get us through the hard times. God doesn't give us more than we can bare.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes that is so true. Thank you :)

[CreativeStroke]

Sadness escapes every word penned in this piece and really gives your reader a window into your pain. Well written and expressed Carolann.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

life is so hard sometimes but never more than we can bear. So good to realize we are needed by those we love.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes that is so true. Thank you.