Broken

Like a dagger 
pain cuts 
through my heart 
Love fails 
once again to start 

Too many things 
get in the way 
Misconstrued 
the words I say 

An open wound 
bleeds into my soul 
Broken pieces 
that can never be whole 

Tears fall 
in a cascade of suffering 
Damaged goods 
not worth recovering 

If you see me 
just look away 
I'm not worth knowing 
I'll just cause you pain 

I'm broken inside 
there's no hope for me 
Too much damage was done 
I'll never be free 

Reviews

[Leigh]

I find this very emotional and sad. You sound very defeated, resigned like you have given up, which is sad and not your decision to make, I mean come on you just can't opt out, can you? I feel like a Samaritan talking to a suicidal person, I wouldn't be much good, there figures would be horrendous :-)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Just an expression of the feelings that are there though most days they don't come to the surface. Don't worry I'm not suicidal. Thank you for your review. :)

[Leigh]

No, I didn't think you were, I was reviewing as though it were real if you know what I mean, anyway your work way too balanced not that I'm a shrink either.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :) though it is real some days and I probably have opted out on love. I know what you mean though. And thank you I'm glad my work is balanced :)

[Leigh]

I am sorry you feel like that, I do too sometimes and have had more than one mid-life crisis. Does your poetry help? I'm sure it must do, being able to express your thoughts so clearly puts you at a big advantage, whatever your feeling might be and they must in some way give you a lift. Your work makes me feel good so there's a start.

Leigh

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much that makes me happy. Yes it does help a lot, purges the pain off my soul.

[Leigh]

Oh good, I am pleased too, I have used my poetry to help me deal with the death of others, I find it a great healer in a way, I don't care how good or bad it is. Keep writing and stay strong, I will be listening / reading

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much and you do the same :-)

[Dennis A. Clark]

I'd like to see a companion poem written in the third person--from the point of view of someone who sees this speaker from the outside. What might that outside person say of this speaker?

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes that is a very good point. But can't see it happening. :)

[Dennis A. Clark]

I meant that you would write the companion poem, that is, but in the third person.

"Broken" and then..."Fixed" or "Repaired"? "Healed"?

[Carolann Dowsett]

Maybe one day when I'm feeling a little more that way lol

[Dennis A. Clark]

You could wait for that day to write down the feeling.

Or you could create the day (and that feeling) through writing.

[Carolann Dowsett]

That is true, though I often do write more positive poems full of hope. Just some days feel like I'm all out.