Hungry Eyes

You look at me

with those hungry eyes

Trying to beguile me

to hypnotise

 

Your mouth drips honey

words sweeter than wine

You like the feel of my hair

the way my eyes shine

 

You devour my body

with lustful delight

try to tempt me with kisses

set my passion alight

 

You try every trick

in your book of seduction

but I’ve read the ending

and it leads to destruction

 

Are you in love with me

do you admire my mind

or are you just a sleaze

looking for a good time

 

Do you think that I’m easy

that you can do as you please

maul me and push me

then call me a tease

 

I’m looking for love

not a one night stand

So forget all your fantasies

give up your plans

 

Go find someone else

to fulfil your desires

Cause I’m fed up with creeps

players and liars

 

If you want to date me

then show some respect

Take time to know me

we just might connect

 

We might find something special

that’s deeper than lust

Something with meaning

that we both can trust

 

So back off a bit

give me some space

Take your eyes off my b***s

and look at my face

 

I’m not just a plaything

for you to abuse

I’m a real live girl

and I won’t be used.

 

Reviews

[Frieda P]

That had some moxy to it girl! Kind of playful yet direct with a lot of impact to back it up....

'Are you in love with me
do you admire my mind
or are you just a sleaze
looking for a good time'

Yeah, like that one...pow to the kisser, those classes are paying off! Good one.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Haha thanks Frieda I must say it brought a smile to my face when this came out :)

[Frieda P]

Brought a smile to my face for you ;-)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Haha awesome :)

[Overrated-World]

great read. Tells things from your POV.
love it :)
I love the end stanza.
"I'm not just a plaything
for you to abuse
I'm a real live girl
and i won't be used"

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you glad you liked it :)

[KeeD]

I like the flare to this piece along with the intensity. You tell them who's boss Carolann :)
Loved it.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you Kee. :)

[Gomer LePoet]

LOL ! this is full of great lines and truisms. but seriously, just what is your opinion on men? ha ha. cute, great rhythm and a nail-on-the-head hitter. thanks for sharing. :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :) I have a high opinion of good men, but in regards to players, creeps and liars, not so good. :)

[Dream Weaver]

I'm a fan of rhyme in this piece it worked so well.
More questions than answers between love and
lust...Enjoyed it very much nice work!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you that's great :)

[Dream Weaver]

You're welcome, I really did enjoy it... :)

[Mir]

it's sad that so many guys think they're better going down the 'player' route.
This was a really great message. And someday, a guys going to want you for your mind, not what you can give him.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you Miranda that'll be the day for sure :)

[Jessie]

Rawr ;)
You get em girl!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Haha thanks :)

[Emerald Seas]

Tell 'em how it is! Powerful and full of gusto. I like it!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you )

[icelandicblue]

Love the rhyme and voice in this piece. This is well written and the voice in this is most certainly hear.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[kink]

nice one. perfect rhyming and it goes in a flow. you told wot you have to say without any nonsense my kind of read..:)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

hey u got it right

hit it right where it hurts..

my fav lines "You try every trick

in your book of seduction

but I’ve read the ending

and it leads to destruction"

and the last verse too:)
u dont mince words u speak ur mind

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

yes