I Fall

I drift aimlessly

through a sea of distant faces                                                    

a million souls who stare sightlessly

into the unknown      

 

I float among them

as invisible as the air they breathe                                             

I am but a ghostly being                                                             

a mystery to their eyes                                                                                                 

They look through me

to a place that is beyond my reach    

a place of which I do not belong                                                                              

Alone

I play tag with the stars                                                              

I reach for the heavens

and the touch of glory fills me                            

 

Unknown

untouched

unloved                                                                                    

I fall                                                                                                                                           

I am watched

yet unseen                                                                                

I scream

yet no one hears me                 

I hold on to the heavens                                                          

to the breath of glory

that has touched me                             

It is as a lifeboat in a stormy sea                                                

a lifeline to my soul                                                                                                             

I fall for an eternity

through a world of heartless beings                                        

held together by a golden thread of glory                                                               

The first stitch of life

embedding itself into my heart 

knitting me back together                                                

making me once again whole                                                                               

Silence surrounds me                                                                  

I am suspended

in an ocean of light                              

The glory of heaven

engulfs me                       

I drift away

into unknown realms of existence                                            

to places unknown to man                                                                                                  

I fall into an eternal sleep

but life interrupts me                

I try to ignore the fretful cries of those around me                   

but their need is too strong                                                                                              

I fight to the surface of my everlasting dream                              

I fight to reach those I love                                                      

to not give in to the temptation

of an endless sleep         

 

Life calls out to me                                                        

whispers my name                                                                   

I awake with the touch of glory

entwining itself through my soul                  

golden threads of sunlight

dance upon my skin                      

 

I am in a place filled with light and colour                               

the aromas of life overwhelm me                                             

I breathe in the fragrance of a new day                                                               

Needed

yet alone

I stand to face another day                                                       

to drift aimlessly

through a sea of distant faces        

where once again

 

Unknown

untouched

unloved                                                                                    

I fall

Reviews

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Alone
I play tag with the stars

This speaks to me Carolann of the anonymous life of cities and inumerous billions on a planet, where to 'stand out' feels absurd, since we are all so the same.

This was perhaps the best poem I've read by you thus far. It is extremely poetic and well-crafted.

More lines I like include:

1. I breathe in the fragrance of a new day
2.Unknown
untouched
unloved
I fall

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much, means a lot.

[Leigh]

I am getting a feeling of falling, floating and drifting as you describe, this is very atmospheric, ethereal and enchanting as a read, which is also sad at the end. It is quite ghost like.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow thank you so much :)

[Georgia Gypsy]

I wish for a like button...much like facebook, for the simple reason that this holds so much power further comment on it seems unnecessary.
*like* !!!!!!!!!
GG

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much. :)

[lark1311]

What beautiful words. Nice write.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Dee]

I am watched
yet unseen
I scream
yet no one hears me


Your weave words beautifully to describe emotions.
I connected to the poem on a personal level, thank you for writing it. :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

What form is this?...
if it is...a preset ...i haven't come across before...
and the poem is interesting.

[Carolann Dowsett]

I don't know what form it is it just came out that way o-O

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

wow

[Carolann Dowsett]

Lol I don't know much about poetry I just write it

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Taz fine too

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. I like the way you led me into a journey of thoughts and story of love untouched.
"Unknown
untouched
unloved
I fall"
Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much :)

[Salar Majak]

hmmm you tell the story ever so beautifully, the way you fall, the way they need you although you feel un noticed, unloved, the way they use you and you putup with it, what a sad tale, AMAZING POETRY THOGUH this is surly one of my favourites!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much :)

[Salar Majak]

you are so welcome

[Jessie]

"i play tag with the stars"
This is beautiful! And the emotion runs deep
Thanks for the post!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much :)

[Night]

...ah my dear sweet Carolann, such beauty in your soul...You are more loved in this world than you will ever know...:)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so, so much David. :)

[Night]

...always my friend.:)