Falling

Falling into a well of despair

there is only darkness

no light exists there

 

There's no more tomorrow

and yesterdays gone

no point in trying

no way to move on

 

The light of promise

has grown too dim

dreams lay in shatters

hope is stretched thin

 

Oh show me an island

away from the world

a place of great beauty

the most treasured pearl

 

Show me an island

where I can be free

away from the longings

that torment me

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the wish in the poem. Would be nice to find a far-away place to forget. Each of try to forget. I had left the country to escape memories. I had to return and face the memories. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you.

[Leigh]

That island sounds good, can I come ? I can see how this is divided up, there's the 1st stanza, then there's the 2nd and 3rd, then there's the 4th and 5th and that works well as sub sections of this poem. I like the 2nd stanza the best.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Got to find the Island first :) Thank you :)

[quinfinn]

if you ever find that island i am in fervent hope that you won't mind sharing it with a kindred soul. marvelous write!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much :)

[quinfinn]

welcome

[Jessie]

So true...
"Show me an island where i can be free
away from the longings that torment me"
This is beautiful!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Tate Morgan]

the past was a downer but you have no where to go now buit up and only you know how high that can go /But you seem a good soul and will go far

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :) Yes I will fly

[Clockwork]

This poem sounds quite a bit like a descent into the world of depression. You show us how light seems to shrink and darkness grows deep. The wish at the end of this piece is a very sincere one to be free and to find peace again. I think you have described this feeling very well.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you

[Clockwork]

Welcome :-)

[GlacialStars]

O: great poem. You have wandered into the most famous and unmastered subject of poetry: the escape.
That feelings that you have of just wanting to leave everything behind and starting over. To just give up this life and to build a new one. That feeling of despair that washes down on mankind leaves them to search for something new...for the ideal. A lot of poems speak of that but you know what's interesting?

Its by writing that poem that you escape, its by realizing you are imprisoned that you are free. I truly loved this poem because not only did you bring up our most precious dream of escaping our own lives but you also planted a seed of hope in our lives. That one day we will see that island and free ourselves from our own selfish desires. Be happy and mostly be free. Great and inspiring poem! :D

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much. I'm glad it spoke to you.

[GlacialStars]

Welcome (sorry for the ''length'' of my review....I tend to do that)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Oh that's cool I like long reviews :)

[GlacialStars]

Ah ok you are going to live my reviews then xD

[Carolann Dowsett]

cool :)

[Baby Ricochet]

I'll get a rope and pull you out

[Carolann Dowsett]

Please do and hurry ok I can't hang on much longer :)

[Emerald Seas]

A powerful, deeply penetrating poem. I had several months were I can say this poem would be spot on for my feelings. It toke a year or so to come to grips with the range of emotions that I faced and started to see a light to let go... and this wasn't even over a lover!
Deeply moving.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow ok well I'm glad it touched you somehow. Thank you.

[Ahmad Cox]

So beautiful and ethereal and longing. I can feel the true emotion coming out in this poem.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Salar Majak]

i love this poem, don't worry, for we don't know what tomorrow brings, it should be good though or i'll die XD just kidding, a beautiful poem, i love the way you mixed the wish with in making a new direction of hope to te poem, nice job.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Salar Majak]

:)