I think this is my favorite poem of yours! I loved the rhyming and just the whole thing was great! :D
'this bloody insanity, has made me insane' Those ones were like the statement of the whole poem! Maybe because it's the last part, but it stood out the most! Great job!
Addicts are everywhere. From the look in their eyes, you can obviously see that they took drugs. People always avoid them thinking that they're out of their minds and since they're under the influence of drugs, they tend to do crazy things. Just like what you've written, bad consequences happen to them leading them to depression. This poem made me think of those people and they should read this before they involve themselves in something more dangerous than drugs. I hope you write more of this and thank you for sharing!
Ohh, I love the rhymes in this one. Made it an easy, enjoyable read. This poem reminds me of a character in a book I just finished reading. He muttered and mumbled and was very confused (and yes, insane) Nice work!
There are many like that living without hope...so sad. Some choose to live like that, others are pushed into it. Drugs, mental illness, high cost of living...it can be a harsh world out there. Nice write.:)
Yes that is so true and it breaks my heart. This is the first one I have seen for a while, though, w.. read moreYes that is so true and it breaks my heart. This is the first one I have seen for a while, though, with such madness in his eyes. It was heartbreaking but also rather frightening.
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...yikes...very scary for a woman...you be careful now...I'll ask God to send extra angels to keep y.. read more...yikes...very scary for a woman...you be careful now...I'll ask God to send extra angels to keep you safe.:)
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Thank you :) Though there were lots of other people around, frightening to see someone that far gone.. read moreThank you :) Though there were lots of other people around, frightening to see someone that far gone though.
Nice repetition usage. I think that it applies to being insane in many ways. Repeat.
I don't know that drugs can make one insane, but then again, I've seen it with my own eyes...
I am not sure how I feel about the single reference to the "one". It doesn't seem to apply to the rest of the piece if you know what I mean. There is so much repetition that the "one" seems to stick out as not belonging.
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I could be totally off base though.
Overall really nice work.'
Great job!
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11 Years Ago
Cool :) Thank you It's kinda just the way it came out and is supposed to show the loss of a life onc.. read moreCool :) Thank you It's kinda just the way it came out and is supposed to show the loss of a life once lived. Still I'll take another look.
I am Vulnerable
Broken
Strong and Fearless
I am all things to all people
Yet I belong to none
I am Elusive
Unknown
A whisper of things to come
I am a Warrior
In an endless war
Victori.. more..