Shattered Dreams

I watch my life

through a window of broken glass

As fragments of my heart

are carried away

on a careless breeze

destined for worlds

unseen

I wait for eternity

but it refuses to come

Stardust fills my eyes

forming tears that sparkle

in the light of the moon

as they forge pathways of grief

across a face etched in pain

Despair comes

an unholy visitor of the night

Entwining itself

through every fibre of my being

Strangling the life

out of my veins

until nothing remains

Just the darkness

of shattered dreams

Forever lost

memories

of what could have been

 

 

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

It still may be, tonight you will dream again
and when you dream it will be full and
voluptuous, teeming with life and passion.
I love your poem, but you need to realize
that when one dream ends, another begins.
That is how life is and your dreams mimic
your reality.

You exhibit a phenominal gift for writing ,
romance, adventure and mysticism.
I look forward to reading more of you.
---- Eagle Cruagh

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you that's a beautiful way to put it. I will be posting more work tomorrow and I look forward to reading some of your work too.

[Ghost]

You touched again on my feelings how I relate to this poem, I think you have some powerfully amazing words.. Thank you for sharing

[Overrated-World]

So great and deep.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Tate Morgan]

You have some good memories some tragic .Yet youth still has its hold on you. I sense a need to be loved again.This is the eternal human desire

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes I guess it is :) Thank you :)

[Chris]

my mind's voice has trouble following the flow - causing uncertain restarts and pauses and continually losing the train of thought. The emotional intent was very evident and the words fit the tone but not always the flow.

[Carolann Dowsett]

ok thank you

[quinfinn]

it seems you are no stranger to the many pitfalls and awkward nuances of loves past. so beautifully worded, this feels akin to some of my own experiences, so it is very relateable to me. i think this is a wonderful prose, and i relate to those feelings and dreams. well done!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you

[An owl on the moon]

Fragmented glimpses through shards of glass bring an overwhelming feeling of loss... of pain... of desires undone... Yes, shattered dreams are like waves of the sea.

[Carolann Dowsett]

They are :) thank you

[Leigh]

'Unholy visitor of the night', I love that line, this is very sad in its look at the past. Your descriptions evoke an ethereal feeling, as though you are floating at night, being carried away by your thoughts. I hope your dreams bring you happier dreams in the future

Leigh

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much.

[Night]

...incredible, how can something so sad be so very beautiful...this was one of your best...I felt your pain...wow!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much, means a lot.

[Night]

...you're so very welcome...:)

[Frieda P]

Loving the imagery of this write.

'As fragments of my heart
are carried away
on a careless breeze
destined for worlds
unseen'

Nicely penned.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)