~ Polly and Peggy ~

~ Polly and Peggy ~

A Story by Carola
"

a simple short story or a prose poem, not quite sure what to classify it as.

"

© 2023 Carola


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' It was a pleasant park surrounded by tall trees with - Scattered colourful flowering bushy shrubs - Everywhere - Which attracted butterflies, .. .. -

Such a joy to read, even if the ending was clever surprise, Carola. You caught me off guard, reading about that park, its surroundings so gently included.. a relaxing place, peaceful, colourful. Will come back to this again.. had me happily focussed for a while and that's a must for now. Thank you so much.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carola

4 Years Ago

glad you liked it emmajoy.
i wrote it to show what people consider normal suburbia, that in t.. read more
emmajoy

4 Years Ago

Guess that applies to human beings too.. there's always an ugliness waiting to pounce. That said, i.. read more



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Very entertaining and quite realistic
We have a bit of a park like atmosphere around our place, and alongside one livingroom window, in a large mock orange, a Robin (Roberta) was raising chicks.
One morning, as I looked out on the lawn, there was a Hawk standing on her dead body!
Not as fortunate as Polly or Peggy

Posted 4 Years Ago


Carola

4 Years Ago

i would say she was defending her chicks from the hawk.
o what did you do with the chicks --.. read more
Dave Brown

4 Years Ago

I was a few years ago and we made sure Daddy was still on the scene
We could see them clearly.. read more
Carola

4 Years Ago

good on you david. outcomes like this aren't always happy
The reader is taken for a ride of the park with effortless ease. The end was definitely a surprise. The last 2 sentence could have been avoided for the reader to draw his own conclusion. This only a feedback. Am not an expert. I just felt so.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Carola

4 Years Ago

thanks for your feedback jacob.
the reader can draw his own conclusion by my last sentence, w.. read more
It's sad the serenity couldn't have continued, but the goshawk must have been hungry. Nature is such a joy to watch... until the feeding begins. Recently, my wife's little dogs have been bringing dead, baby birds into the house that they "acquired" somewhere in the back yard. How I wish the little fledglings could have darted away and saved themselves like Polly and Peggy. Thank you for this happy ending.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Carola

4 Years Ago

thanks for reading & commenting samuel.
i wrote that 'hopefully' peggy & polly got away, i l.. read more
This is beautiful the ending a lovely pleasant surprise too
This is a great first chapter for a short story


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carola

4 Years Ago

hi julie, thanks for reading & commenting.
it never occurred to me that this writing could ha.. read more
Got me, thought in was two old biddies chatting in the park.
Then I thought some nutter had escaped from the asylum.
Sort of glad, Polly and Peggy escaped to natter another day.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carola

4 Years Ago

hi paul, it was meant to catch readers out. 😀
ah! but polly & peggy Hopefully got away, i .. read more
Paul Bell

4 Years Ago

Oops, pigeon pie. lol
The goshawk failed to predate the lovely creatures.
They were alert and the Creator was kind to them.
But had there been a heartless hunter with goshawk in the park,
The innocent birds would surely be heinously slaughtered.
Dear Carola,you depicted a natural phenomenon of life of prey and predator where the innocent birds could escape.You depicted it very nicely.I am horrified by the partnership of evil creatures to destabilize the peace in the world. I am adding a link to support my point.
Thank you for taking time to enlighten people about a peculiar situation.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pgL1x8ivEtY

Posted 4 Years Ago


a fancy full story told well... you DID draw me in ...willingly.

Posted 4 Years Ago


' It was a pleasant park surrounded by tall trees with - Scattered colourful flowering bushy shrubs - Everywhere - Which attracted butterflies, .. .. -

Such a joy to read, even if the ending was clever surprise, Carola. You caught me off guard, reading about that park, its surroundings so gently included.. a relaxing place, peaceful, colourful. Will come back to this again.. had me happily focussed for a while and that's a must for now. Thank you so much.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carola

4 Years Ago

glad you liked it emmajoy.
i wrote it to show what people consider normal suburbia, that in t.. read more
emmajoy

4 Years Ago

Guess that applies to human beings too.. there's always an ugliness waiting to pounce. That said, i.. read more

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