Wow, this is such a radical example of it's own structure! You used words in a way I have never before seen/read. A message is in there, like all art, but you made the words art in itself by how you arranged them. The form reminds me of an eye test... but it really is a reality check for our brains because us silly humans are always freaking out about every little thing that goes wrong in day to day life. Nice work. Very different!
Posted 17 Years Ago
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Compartment 114
Compartment 114
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This was a very structurally inventive poem. I would've never thought of it. This is why I love reading other people's work so much. It makes me realize we all work in different ways.
This poem is very different and it has a very unique layout and format-it definitely gets your point across. Plus, I like how it's so ironic when you say "nothing is a mistake" and then all of a sudden, you turn it upside down, showing that a mistake does leave a huge effect. I was really taken by suprise!
Well anyways, I really enjoyed this poem and it's extremely different, but it's a great poem in general.
And then went down to the ship, Set keel to breakers, forth on the godly sea, and . . . Ezra Pound (TCOEP).
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