Because Of . . .

Because Of . . .

Local Airwaves Dormant Days Were Forced To

Withdraw

Consulting Renderings Of . . .

Broad Banned

Connection Monitored Confluence Of . . .
Signings And Parcel Bombings At Best Of . . .
All Places Legendary--Wall Paintings Of . . .

(Confidence) Everything From “Reality”

Names Would Be Additional Process, Carved
Picture Palpable, Dispelling Widowed Orphans
Whose Mothers Show Progress Meeting
Demands Started Decaydes Ago

Intriguing Widest Release Of . . .

Siblings

Darken Settlements Overloaded Behind
Strong Performances Of . . .

Immune Interest

Ameliorated, The Speaker Returned Airporting
Touch Downs In Ceremonial Gesture Research

So Ubiquitous, That Drift Supports Seconds
Left Of . . .

The Early Momentum Path Past Profits

No Sobering Of . . .

Your Head’s Droning Cells Phone
No Doubt For Its Executive Calls
Its Decision Of . . .

Possession At The Center:

Residents’ Testimony Of . . .
Greater Watt Age Colleagues Of . . .
Second Study Of . . .
First Language Anatomy Of . . .
Monumental Effort Of . . .
Conscripted Wounded Living Legends Of . . .

Weight Lifting.

© Carol Maric
All Rights Reserved

© 2007 Carol Maric - Being: The Obsession, Continued . . . A Raging Epidemic !

Reviews

[Hawksmoor]

I won't lie to you...although this is very well done, in its construction and execution, not to mention a completely unique style, it went totally over my head. LOL. Gimme a while to think and wake up, maybe have a drink, and then I'll be back to give it another shot. By the way, you and I used to talk a lot, read each other a lot. What happened to that, may I ask?

Hawksmoor...From The Bleed.

[Diánna Martin (b..]

I enjoyed this because of the powerful feeling underneath it and found at times that I could follow where you were going.

I have to admit that I will need more readings of it to understand what you are trying to say. I have to agree with some of what Randall says, in respect to "trying hard to say...little..." -- which is something that I do in my writing and am trying to work on.

I find that sometimes when we choose a writing styie we are going to work with for a particular piece, sometimes we get hung up on the style more than what it is that we are trying to convey. Your emotional depth and talent help you avoid falling into that pitfall too deeply, but I feel that the poem is still being run more by it's style than by the writer.

Other than that, excellent work.

[Randy Mckenica -writers..]

As an expermental style it is relatively immune to critique of structure, but from a thinking man's perspective, it tries to hard to say to little. As someone accustomed to being accused of sounding forced, I wish i could hold this up as an example of something that I would call "forced". You come across as a brilliant person, but your work feels to me more cryptic than brilliant. I agree with the previous reviewer, maybe if you created a hybrid of that mass intellect with a more traditional style your ideas would convey better. And isn't that what we are all striving for?

[Christopher Tait]

Like a David Lynch movie, I don't always get it but I appreciate and enjoy the style despite it. This is a bit easier to get into than some of the other stuff I've read of your's, and I think I might've gotten an idea of what you were going for here. Maybe, in the future, just as an exercise, try a quick, more direct style, and see what happens. Of course, I could be full of it. Either way, it's obvious you have talent and I look forward to your future writings.

[Pat]

When I read this, I felt the weight of the headlines of the past five years come crashing down. I'm a simple guy and rarely wax eloquent, but if I could I'd say this was a �poignant rendering� or something.

[Ilene M.W. Lush]

anything but lovesick a rose is a rose is a rose

[J. Swaney]

Man I feel like an idiot today. I have to tell you that I didn't get it. I re-read it and I still don't get it. I'm sorry, I want to get it but I just don't. Can you take a moment and explain it to me seriously.


J.S.

[Julian Gallo]

This poem is also very "Burroughs-esque" to me in it's feel. I mean this as a huge compliment, by the way. I am also getting the message of how technology has lessened the human experience with regard to interacting with one another. I'm not sure if this was your intent but this is how I am reading it. I like it's experimental nature, of course....trying to take the poem to new areas.

[Ted]

HOT, HOT, COMING THROUGH.........TO THE TOP!!!!

That is..............FAVORITE!!!!

[Bea Wass]

wow