Death tale

Life

Its friday the 13th a start of a bad dream if you could see what i see but its all reality family trees full of OG’s stopped by the police treating us like the vietnamese instead of yelling gooks they just shoot down are ancestry root locking us up in institutes 22% of you is inside fighting for food and freedom from involuntary servitude and tattooed. Looking at me and you with no one to look up to isnt this deja vu growing up with fucked up attitudes and weed as a substitute for a father thats what made us stronger at least thats what is said most in hospitals on death beds prying to the good lord to have mercy please let me in this journey worry free Wish it wasnt like this but its a suicide kiss from the death f**k it tho im just wasting my breath …. Do what you please just dont listen to me and see the same tales i see theyll leave you in these streets to bleed but thats your destiny secondly in my testimony all you phony wannabees this aint like those stories theres no happy endings stop before we have to have religious ceremony.

Author's Note

Just need some input

Reviews

[Nichole]

I really liked this one and it obviously speaks from the heart. It definitely flows like a rap which is good. I can hear the rhythm to it. However I do think it needs to be cleaned up a bit. Like fixing the grammar slightly. And organizing it better into lines and stanzas would help.

[Los3]

Yes thank you I understand my raps contain everyday life problems even if I didn't physically encounter them is like more of a way to vent out for others I've met or my own experiance