Remembrance

　

Remembrance

　

Taking

these final steps

Acting all

alone

Lustful

love

Impeding

it

Tenderly

tainted

Hanging all my

hopes

Abandoning our

affair

Manipulative

memories

Yearning

you

　

Like my

lovesick

Owl,ignoring my

obeys,only to fall in

Vain,for he is

vulnerable to

Earthly

emotions...

Author's Note

Another hard new age poem,I have to admit I had to take some time with this. As you'll probably see this poem has words, but before your minds ran,let me explain this this. I wrote this in a certain why to bring out my hidden message in the poem. So yes there is two pieces in each other :) I really hope you get what I'm trying to say and thank you for reading it! :)

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I see this is done in acrostic ---
by the way its design...
and the write has a meaning...
intended for the person of interest..
and that goes along with this work...

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Thank you for reading it man :) and giving your thoughts

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...

[Sharon Kim]

This is great Carl! I really enjoyed the way you set up this poem. I'm sorry Talitha got away!

[Carl Drake Barnard]

HEhe yah she was more the woman type in the end but shes a good friend though thanks for reading :)

[NeiL ArandA]

TALITHA MY LOVE was the hidden code here ...

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Haha yes it was :)

[Poetic Beauty]

We are human and sometimes emotions come into play that were never expected to happen. Life can drift people apart emotionally and then things happen that were never suppose to happen. Love can be fleeting. I like the way this poem is set up and the word choices here are strong without going over board.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe thank you for awesome review really appreciate it :)

[Poetic Beauty]

I just stumbled upon your writing and I am glad I did. Deep thoughts in this piece.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe don't peek through all of them I express my headings,and I think about form to all of them even words play along with my pieces and then my deeper meanings are imbued Hehe but if you are a lovesick poetess Hehe then feel free Hehe

[Poetic Beauty]

I write about a great many things and many different pieces and styles appeal to my brain. I will definitely reading more later on.

[ms. barrie]

Beautifully brilliant write Carl, very unique and eloquently poignant write with the stirring, relateable
imagery your words captured here. i love the unique format as well, very clever, acrostic

Great, very moving write...thanks for sharing! :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Thank you Barrie for such an Inspirational review :) Means a lot to me :D

[ms. barrie]

you welcome, Carl. i very much enjoyed reading it. will re visit your writes soon, be well :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Well, well, Carl... Look at this! :))
So proud of you!... I see you finished this piece, wonderfully!

To see the final touches makes me smile...

You have painted an impassioned emotion... Indeed!
Nicely done! ;D

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thanks Robbie :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Very different set up for an acrostic. So Talitha did you wrong? What a poignant write...and the stanzas are set apart like your heart....ripped apart. Not sure what to make of the "ignoring my obeys"....perhaps you were too demanding and controlling in the relationship? Hmm.....not sure, but I did like the poem. Lydi**

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thank you lydi! :) Talitha and I were kinda together but she just left without a goodbye or anything.Ignoring my obeys,I tried to fit it in,like my lovesick owl,Ignoring my memories obey's. but part of me believes that my lust for our love drove us apart. :) thanks for a great review :)

[Frieda P]

'Talitha my love', lucky Talitha, whoever she may be, it read bittersweet...seems the memories were a bit skewed. Nicely pen'd.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

:) Hehe yes, thank you for the review and your kind words! :) much appreciated.

[Frieda P]

You're welcome, I like the structure of your poem, enjoyed. :-)