Dreaming

Dreams show us the way but some linger in the past. Foretelling parts you push away in the deepness of your mind and soul.

Dreaming

The moon and stars were

Hidden from sight

Making this night especially

dark

Rays of moonlight

appeared out from above

surrounding a most beautiful sight

for it was my love

Stunned by the beautifulness

of her expression

So full of happiness

and passion

It felt like a dream

Suddenly it had begun to rain

and I heard her scream

for she was in pain

Then as if her screams were heard

The rain came to an end

the sky cleared

And i could smell a familiar scent

It was the scent of grass after a rainy day

It reminded me of the time we first met

That's when I heard her say

“I'm all wet!!”

Laughter arouse

and for a short while we were close

She smiled and suddenly kissed me

And for the first time in years I thought about what we could be

And then tears of our stream

formed and then I was unblinded

for I was reminded

“It's only just a dream”

Author's Note

Must admit this one was a bit hard for me had to think a lot haha.Hope you enjoy if any comment on how bad or good it is please be free with words I'm all eyes lol :)

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I really enjoyed this piece very romantic and so full of emotion.
It seems like she had died or something, and then this guy in this poem dreamt of her only to wake and find it was only a dream and she really is gone.
Or am i wrong?
Either way i really loved the whole story line and meaning to it, it all comes together and flows quite nicely :)
Great write :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Thanks,hmm its whatever you can imagin :) personaly it was a daydream,someone lovable from my past :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

oh yer :) well thats cool :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Haha thanks :)

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

I imagined it to be a fantasy, or perhaps a remembrance of an encounter that sadly ended. A poignant piece, very well done.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Thank you :) for this appreciative review! :)

[A. Amos]

It felt like a dream
Suddenly it had begun to rain
and I heard her scream
for she was in pain

Unique, elegant and wonderful writing. Thanks for sharing

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Thanks for your wonderful review! :)

[Sue Hart]

Sometimes I see beyond the writers intention. I saw earth in the midst of the universe. Stars shinning and clouds moving in, rain beginning, steam from the heat of the earth, the rain making her wet, mixed tears forming the water upon the ground into rivers.
Like I said, it's just the way I followed it. Sorry if I totally missed it. But my way was so beautiful to see as I read.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe as long as you see yourself or even a glimpse of my poetry I'm happy thanks for reading!! :)

[Sue Hart]

Thanks for writing and allowing me to dream as I read.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

:) my pleasure!! :)

[Justsimplyjulia]

So beautiful. Everything about this poem was beautiful. The font, your words choice, the diction, it was all so beautiful.
Fabulous write, i really enjoyed it.
-Dragon

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe enjoyed your review! Thanks Dragon :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

I agree with my sister, - Ik ben het eens met mijn zus.

You write so out of yourself here out of good heart, and love - je schrijft zo buiten jezelf hier, uit een goed hart, en liefde

Sometimes dreams are a deception - soms zijn dromen bedrog...
But know, - Maar weet,
That they dream a world - Dat ze dromen een wereld,
Vol vrede en geluk - Full of love and happiness.

Ik waardeer dromen - I treasure dreams,
Ik studeer ze, - I study them,
Voor ze zijn geweldig, en laten ons groeien, - For they are awesome, and make us grow.

Je schrijft als een romanticus, in hart en nieren - You write like a romantic in heart as kidney's
Misschien zo hard voor jou te schrijven - maybe so hard for you to write
Maar zo echt, puur, liefelijk en goed... - but so pure, loveble, and good....

I was free here you see? I rambled all away. Thanks to your quill of love.

- Elisa

[Carl Drake Barnard]

wat 'n wonderlik review!! What a wonderful review!! Thanks Eli!! :) Hehe and yes I see thank you and my plesier :)

Graag gedaan lieve vriend. - You're welcome sweet friend... Altijd - Always...

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe So kind of you thanks Eli :)

You're always welcome. - Graag gedaan lieve vriend... drukkies x

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is Gorgeous and moving!!
You have inspired me, simply by weaving this mystical poem...
To sprinkle such glittering words upon the heartbreak of romance is a gift...
A pleasure to read...and I, so lucky to take a peek behind the scene.
Heartfelt..and a favorite.~xoxo~

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe thank you I'm glad you liked it Hehe. sorrow is my love for now and words makes it alive so that I can feel and relive it. Might sound pathetic or sad or really desperate but its part of me till I meet her again and buy all that's holly when that day comes I'll write a happy poem lol thanks for the Grait review :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

My pleasure... Best wishes, my friend...she/and love is worth waiting for... :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

:) that's the sad part I like being a loner lol :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

There is nothing sad about that... You like your space. :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe true :) and thanks for such a love review :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It is a nice write... Keep penning. :)