Because I can't stop

Moving like the speed of sound

I Cant seem to keep on the ground

cant stay in one place

I keep moving on to end my race

 

Because I cant stop time

I cant stop worrying in my mind

All these spaces I take cant defined

All my sorrows I try to leave behind

 

I cant stay the same

Nor stop to be tame

I Cant stop feeling this pain

coursing through my veins

 

Because I cant stop crying'

My body keeps trying

Forcing my self to keep lying

That you aren't dying

Author's Note

Edit it a little still looks the same though hmm.... any ideas?

Reviews

[MsJewel]

I could feel the pain and emotion in your words. There is no doubt in my mind you wrote this from your heart - and you have touched mine.

:) Julie

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Thank you Julie for all your kind words,means a lot! :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Sometimes we are addicted to pain, as if you need to feel something... and when you try to shut it out you become a fiend for it....you can't stop...

Well done... An emotional write, indeed....

[Carl Drake Barnard]

I know,and thank you for such dedicated review!! :)

[Vertigoingnowhere]

Hello dear. This poem is really great. I like the rhyme scheme and I can feel your pain. I hope things start looking up to you. Keep up the good work

Small point..remember your apostrophes in contractions :)

Stay Rad

-High School

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thanks for your review,I tried to write this in the old poetic way leaving apostrophes,for this increases the paste of the readers slightly forcing them to read on. I tried to link this style with my poem let me know what you think abt it :)

[Vertigoingnowhere]

Oh well when you put it that way
Well done :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe I had a insane good writer teacher we wrote together and showed me a lot :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Strong in emotional content and feeling...there is a vulnerability to your words even when you are being strong. I find the flow of this one a little stilted in terms of the rhyme, which I think held back piece just a little bit, but that didn't take away from the message, which shined brightly and beautifully.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thanks for your Grait review :)

[Alea Faith Ridgley]

I Could def feel the emotion behind this... there is no doubt about it.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thank you faith :)

[Alea Faith Ridgley]

wow, this had my heart raising.....

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Thanks Hehe