Because I can't stop

Moving like the speed of sound

I Cant seem to keep on the ground

cant stay in one place

I keep moving on to end my race

 

Because I cant stop time

I cant stop worrying in my mind

All these spaces I take cant defined

All my sorrows I try to leave behind

 

I cant stay the same

Nor stop to be tame

I Cant stop feeling this pain

coursing through my veins

 

Because I cant stop crying'

My body keeps trying

Forcing my self to keep lying

That you aren't dying

Author's Note

Edit it a little still looks the same though hmm.... any ideas?

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

there are some things that we just cant accept and our bodies revolt against the trying. Well done.

[NeiL ArandA]

I'll be back for this ...you want it to rhyme right ?

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Nope its not abt rhyming this piece has deepness hehe thanks though much appreciated

[NeiL ArandA]

I see ..its already good enough

[Anita Singh]

You seem very impulsive and full of emotions! Its a great read.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe where did you read I was impulsive or see? hehe because I am hehe thank you for your great review

[mia]

Wow this is really good I love the words you used and it has a lot of feeling to it :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe thanks Mia :)

[mia]

Any time keep up the fabulous writing :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

THIS ONE WAS AMAZING!!!!
I loved the way it flows and the rhyming was great.
It really tells quite a story....
Its filled with heartache, sadness, pain and a deep deep love.
This was really touching i could feel the pain and emotion behind this poem :)
Great write :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thank you for a Grait review :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

your most welcome :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

You're such a positive person my dear friend, I appreciate that so much in you. There is only "carpe diem" the here and now, although the write is filled with sorrow and pain, you still try to enjoy the moment moments.... poignent, and real.... great ink, like my sister said here beneath too.

- Elisa

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thanks for Grait support Hehe means a lot :)

Plesir ;) always!!!!

[Half Dream]

" Because I cant stop crying'
My body keeps trying
Forcing my self to keep lying
That you aren't dying"

I really love the rhythm! I could feel the pain in this piece. Great ink. :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thank you :) for your kind review :)

[Pryde Foltz]

The last bit was heartbreaking. Great write.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thank you :)

[Avoiry]

I like the last stanza most on this piece. My only comment is that some of the rhyme feels a little forced at some parts. Not for the fact that the rhyme doesn't work i just feel like you might have boxed yourself a bit with it. None the less it is good and it stays on point and gets what your trying to say out clearly.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Yeah I noticed that just can't seem to force my self to edit it but thanks for your review :)