Just to see you again

Poetic song my first ever!!

One way, 

or another,

I have to keep on trying,

Just to,

see you, 

one last time again!

Calling forth the demons,

asking if I could see you again.

Maybe even hold again.

Or maybe,

Baby ,

Just to see you living again.

Please don''t

be sad

This is what I want to do

Just to see you singing again.

God,

Please,

Forgive me,

one last time.

This is something I have to do!

Just to see her breathing again!

Please,

Don't,

be sad,

This is something I have to do.

Just,

to see,

you,

again...

Author's Note

Hope you guys can feel the flow of the song,If not let me know please :)

Reviews

[JBudak]

I like the flow the way it is. I love the contrast, that feeling of wanting to try to be strong, and at the same time wanting to let go. I feel like it comes from a place of grief and desperation, and longing, not only for the lost one, but for release from the pain.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Thanks JBudak :) Really enjoy your great reviews :) thank you for reading!! :) really glad you liked it :)

[TL Boehm]

it is a poignant song indeed. the things we would do to see someone one more time. Reminds me of the song "Fire and Rain by James Taylor

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Thanks lovely I promise to view your work as soon as possible

[NeiL ArandA]

Its very nice Carl .Few but more in content.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

hehe aww thank you for all your reviews :) much appreciated

[Meg]

It certainly has a lot of emotion behind it, which is great. I just think that it could be made to flow a little better, some lines shortened and others extended, etc.
Otherwise, fantastic

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thanks I'll see :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thanks I'll see :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Your song is a painful expression of heartache... death of a loved one is not an easy thing to let go...

Nice work, Carl. :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

How I would love to sit down and just chat with you ,Cosh,every sad poem I write you know exactly what to say and how to say it with such -I wana help you get rid of the pain- Haha thanks for every word and all your reviews* :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It's my pleasure...giving you a hug... (((hug))).... I hope that helps your heart. ~xoxo~:)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

:) Hehe it's healed!! Lol thanks a lot :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Amen to that! lol :D

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe Amen :)

[bushra khalil]

very well balanced use of the words..it's simply wow!

[Carl Drake Barnard]

lol I started singing this randomly just without care,while I was cooking. And then my mind started to add lines to the song. So I ended up cooking,singing and wrighting the same time it sounds so awesome because it is sad slow and now and then a higher tone,when I wrote this I felt this is not Gona work at all because you won't vote on the song but vote on the words. So thanks for your review much appreciated!! :)

[☾Panda☽]

There are 3 dear ones who died, in the last 3 years. That was hard for me, this poem reminds me of them. But I stay positive, cause once I see them again ;-)

Sincerely Panda

[Carl Drake Barnard]

thank you Hehe

[☾Panda☽]

your most welcome hihi

[Earthy Mumma Soul]

I totally feel the emotion of this in my heart , it triggers me to a certain place.. The flow is fine :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Thanks a lot :)