As strong as a rock

As strong as a rock

A Poem by Carl Drake Barnard
"

:)

"

The words may seem

strange

But know you'll be

tamed

 

I miss the tender words

that gave me hope and inspiration

For they made me feel like this

the love and admiration

 

I miss the long nights

we wrote together

Taking me to new heights

Even in the cold weather

 

A writer's message

giving truth and admiration

with respect to one's

direction

                                                                                        
strong and pure

always wanting to

hear more

 

A writer's love
as strong as a rock

with her caring

devotion

 

© 2014 Carl Drake Barnard


Author's Note

Carl Drake Barnard
Needed to edit this to :)

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This poem is really good. I like it! Very nice write. I like the flow! Thank you for writing it :)))

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carl Drake Barnard

11 Years Ago

It's my plesure as long as you like it I'm happy :)
It has a good reflective mood all through, appreciative and hopeful.
First stanza is a statement /assertion ' know you'll be tamed' or is it a typo.. I know.. ?

Stanza 2 and 3 are full grammar and then 4 and 5 and 6 are short and spare - note form.
So maybe you cut them all down spare, chop out the ' I miss.. etc and condense all the stanzas tighter like 4, 5 and 6.

Just my 2 cents

Posted 11 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carl Drake Barnard

11 Years Ago

more a statement,to the heading of course,i wrote know you'll be tamed so that readers could spare t.. read more
Nice tight piece. Enjoyed the read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Carl Drake Barnard

11 Years Ago

thank you :)
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Carl Drake Barnard
Carl Drake Barnard

South Africa



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Hi,I am Carl. I'm a Chef and a writer. I am melancholy-Rage writer as the past have said. And I am like this in real life. I write what I know and stay true to feelings as I discover them in life. more..

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