Short, but packs a lot of emotion. I could feel the pain and agony in the words. And the way you wrote this poem was interesting, and it fit perfectly. Great Job. :)
Carl , this is written with sensitivity toward heartbreak...
I felt the consideration and respect within each drawn line, as if
you were trying to erase the pain, the agony.
Okay first off I have to say the way you wrote this intrigued me. Meaning the font with the crossed out lines like you were covering up what you wrote about her... Just so she couldn't read the pain she has caused you by leaving you high and dry... Your beating bleeding heart still burns for this woman you speak of... I can feel the connection you have for this woman... She must have shot an arrow right through your heart but when she left you she ripped it out without icing the open wound... I can feel the hurt in this piece as well as the love you still have for her...
You want to stop crying over her as you know she will never come back. But you can't just because of what she meant to you. And you know you can't show her you're hurting the way you are... Sorry bro but this is an excellent write... Can't wait to read more...
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
:) I so Love when people try to read my stuff,great to see a different perspective!
Great work, the character in the poem is trying to love but can't cry and is unable to fake it. Message from the poem, love can not be fake, love is real.
really nice written poem with lots of emotion .
Sorry for the broken heart i suppose it is really a very hard feeling that is why many people find it hard to take the try and love but it is not a choice so i suppose when you will find your real love she will make u forget all the past :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Hehe thanks Aseel,It's okay i mean some indiens get married and they never chose who the want their .. read moreHehe thanks Aseel,It's okay i mean some indiens get married and they never chose who the want their parents did and they learned to love one another but thank you i appreciate it :)
Hi,I am Carl. I'm a Chef and a writer.
I am melancholy-Rage writer as the past have said.
And I am like this in real life. I write what I know and stay true to feelings as I discover them in life.
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