Strong Resolve

If you could help me with punctuation. would be most greatful In the spoken bits do I need to start each line with a capital or is small case ok. Who'd be writer thank you in advance carl

I stood with the brave today

I listened as each one spoke

Some spoke in confident tones

While others were ready to choke

"We are not that brave "

I heard each one say

"And it's a strong resolve 

That's made us who we are today"

 

I stood with the lost today 

As they looked for a way home 

I stood with every one of them 

So they were not alone 

"We are not that lost

we just need help along the way 

and it's a strong resolve 

that's made us who we are today" 

 

I stood with the weak today

So that they could feel strong

As each one spoke of struggling

And needing a place to belong

"We are not that weak

as we contend with what comes our way

and it's a strong resolve

that's made us who we are today"

 

I stood with the outcasts today

As they were mocked by some

Over skin and diverse tones

I saw how far we'd come

"We are not the outcasts

and we are hurt by what some say

and it's a strong resolve

that's made us who we are today"

 

I stood with the children today

As they spoke of it being their time

Young hearts ablaze with fire

As they look for a sign

"We are not really children

and respect it works each way

and it's a strong resolve

That's made us who we are today"

 

I stood with the soldiers today

As each laid down his gun

Fathers and Sons from the field they came

Each and everyone 

"We are not really soldiers 

fresh from the battles fray

and its a strong resolve 

that's made us who we are today"

 

I stood with the world today

I stood and silently prayed 

As guns were laid down and young hearts burned

And history was made 

I'd seen how far we'd come 

And how far till journeys end 

And I found that strong resolve 

Upon which we all depend   

Reviews

[Helen Woodward]

You are a wonderful writer Carl with beautiful thoughts; your style is unique and completely comprehensible.
I have found that dialogue doesn't work all that well when it is placed in prose form as opposed to narrative, but as you have shown here, there is no reason to discard it.
Always begin a sentence with a capital letter...dialogue or not. This is extremely well thought out and delivered with an emotional charge to every stanza. It's fine as is, but personally I would try it as running narrative.
Always remember, new speaker...new line. A good rule of thumb.
Cheers,

Helen :-)

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Carl, what a wonderful human poem ..so much sorow in our world ..
Very nice write ... love poems and stories that speak of social issues.

[Sinceer]

good read.

the motif was well played, seamless transitions and what not.


anything touching on the World Today can be a lil boring and generic.

but at the same time, its understanding that i look for.

and well, thx for sharing thoughts on a perspective.


keep em coming.

[Li Li]

Have you ever realized... if you stand still... close your eyes... and let go of everything on your mind.... you become one with everything....

I see you Carl. I see you standing with all these people, and that is what makes me proud to be your friend. God has blessed you with a heart only YOU were worthy of holding. A mind He knew you would be able to decipher and unlock all the talents hidden within.

From the first word of yours I read... I saw in you something I haven't seen in even a few. A real spirit.

This write is a true confession of who you are within. You are one with everybody and everything. It is these people and things that help you speak and be heard. For that, you are loved by many.

So impacting.

[Adelia Alighieri]

Great work.

[Nathan Noble]

i love your style and this was a great write. ill definately be reading more in the future.