Setting Sun

I picked up the book

To forget the scar

And found myself

In lands afar

In a town

Where the West was won

I was in the town

Of Setting Sun

 

I'd known this town

Since my birth

A few wood buildings

On Gods Green Earth

Decent folk

Every single one

In the Wild West town

Of Setting Sun

 

Now Rosie owned

The Tavern bar

Pour you a drink

"Ave you come far"

But beware old Rosie

As you lose your gun

In the Wild west town

Of Setting Sun

 

For Rosie is the stealing kind

Take you upstairs

And rob you blind

And she won't even flinch

When the deed is done

In the Wild West town

Of Setting Sun

 

Now I've come back

You understand

To ask for

My fair Lucy's hand

A Reverand's Daughter

The only one

In the Wild West town

Of Setting Sun

 

We first met

That Summers Day

In the Town Square

Love passed our way

And we both knew

Our time would come

In the Wild West town

Of Setting Sun

 

I met the Jailer

Clayton's the name

He told me things

"Aint been the same

Jack McGarret

Been shooting his gun"

In the Wild West town

Of Setting Sun

 

Clayton shook his head

With a sigh

"I make this vow

Before I die

McGarret must pay

For his deeds each one"

In the Wild West town

Of Setting Sun

 

I went to Rosie's

For a drink

Rest my legs

And time to think

Just what a man needs

When his day is done

In the Wild West town

Of Setting Sun

 

But as I walked

Through the door

Could have heard a pin

Hit the floor

McGarret was there

The low life son

And the scourge

Of Setting Sun

 

"I challenge you to a duel"

He said

"For the hand of Lucy

That she may wed

Tomorrow at noon

The end shall come"

In the Wild West town

Of Setting Sun

 

And so we met

In the Town Square

As the chimes of twelve

Filled the air

Pistol in hand

Lucy's heart won

In the Wild West town

Of Setting Sun

 

The bullet hit Jack

Square in the head

In the dust

He fell down dead

In the distance

The Reverand with a gun

In the Wild West town

Of Setting Sun

 

And so we were married

The very next day

And the whole of the town

Came out to say

Congartulations

To Lucy and me

As a clip round the head

Brought me back to reality

 

 

Author's Note

Many people use books to escape thats what this peice is about

Reviews

[Li Li]

You unfolded a very nice piece here.... I love the quotations mixed with the actual poetic form. It came across like an urban legend. How you hear the stories told, and picture the whole thing in your mind. The people... the place.

This one was more open for you. A different form of "Carl" as I'm used to seeing. A more freestyle/storytelling side. I still know it's your work by the rhyme... but the piece itself was written more openly.

Must say... I love this one. Just as I've loved them all. :O}

Love, always,
Li Li

[Sarah B.]

sounds like this could be a folk song, well written on it's journey. thank you for sharing :)

[Kenny]

I like it. I want to read more.

P.S. Please Review mine!!!!

[Wicahpi]

This was so fun to read! Sounds like a good plot for a book or movie. I love the wild west and the stories that can be told. This was an easy read and not boring at all. Kept me captivated straight through til the end. Good job!
Peace n Light,
♥ Wicahpi Iyozaza ♥

[Anima Inspired]

The truest and most wonderful form of escape...that which we find in books and poetry. I love the story you told here, and the meter and rhythem is just spot on throughout! One of the things I like the most was the way that the whole thing ended, sort of abruptly, like the turning of a page or the closing of a book itself.

Great work!

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

This was truely enjoyed by me. It is well written, witty and engrossing. The story draws the reader in, I felt like I was watching an old western.

Excellent write. Such talent must be appluaded.

Carl,
The poetic verse is astounding and you have taken a simple yet compelling idea and brought it to fruition. You definitely are a true story-teller. The diversive and integral mood evolves with the progression of this piece. I read it with the intent of not knowing how it would it and, like any good writer worth his weight in salt, you took me by surprise and the ending left me speechless. Your talent, well, is amazing and I have just begun to read the large body of work you have composed. I do so look forward to inviting myself into your lair of words.

As for escapism, I am an avid reader of all genres, and if it were not for a "good" read, my world would be less fulfilling. Yet, even in the "movies," there is always an ounce of "truth" as in books. This poem is more than just about a desire to capture love and live happily ever after--on the contrary, it is about facing one's on mortality and this is what slammed me into a very hard-brick wall. Also, this piece speaks about how we are forced to look at how we engage ourselves with others and the choices we make and how those choices can have either positive or dire consequences. Well, done, my new friend.

[Angel Bird]

Anyone who says they have only one life to live must not know how to read a book!

This was a fantastic read! Marvelously done, with a refrain that gives it a wonderful rhythm.
You have a way to give it the exact dose of suspense it needs.

I immensely enjoyed the journey through your book! Thanks for sharing it.

Brilliant work!