Sometimes Life Is...

Okay...so, this poem I wrote like months ago. It's not the best but, I tried. So it doesn't matter how good or bad it is.......right? O.o

Sometimes life is fun and exciting.
I like to put those memories in writing.
Even if they’re sad or happy,
Good or crappy.
It’s still a part of me,
I think…


Sometimes life for me is just dumb and depressing
I don’t think anything else is as interesting.
I mean, it’s great but a bit frustrating.
I moved to so many places,
seeing so many faces.
I can’t even remember them.
And I’m still trying to find out who I am.

So far, nothings going out of hand.
So, I guess I should be glad.

Author's Note

I have no clue what type of poem it is....but I was aiming for a poem that rhymes xD

-Allison

Reviews

[Jock Engelman]

ok so you said that you "dont know what type of poem it is". to answer a basic question (from my opinion) it is what they call "free verse" and it is a very common style of writing (not my personal style).

ok lets analyse this.

your work here is basically giving the message that through literary expression, you can convey your ideas, emotions and experiences, both personal and fictional.

next you have tired to use rhyming schemes similar to "aabbcd" in the first stanza, and in the second you have used "aaabbcd" and in the third you have used just no rhyming scheme.

what i am interested in is why you have separated the final two lines from the second stanza.

also, in my opinion you may need to review the number a syllables that you use in your lines, from my memory, most people like to use (if they are not being exact like myself) a range of about 1-2 difference. eg. 6, 7, 8 variating syllables, but not 9, 11, 5, 4, 5, 2...
it was just a thought if you would have liked to make it flow better.

but i still would give it a rating about about 63/100 because it still conveyed the message and i wasnt trying to force myself to continue to read it.

keep practicing, try looking at other people's works and ask yourself how they composed theirs and try and replicate the style in your own poem and words, then you will eventually break into your own style (thats what i did anyway)

[Lydia]

Lovely written poem. I like it!

[just is]

I loved the first stanza so much,
This is really good, enjoyed the read.

I like this, it has a lot of emotions in it.

...this is amazing really!