To Die

Oh my Lovely Bit of Song...

My Muse has died...
Left with not a tear to cry
Nor eye to dry
A world, a life to divide
A soul that would reside
Within twin darkened eye
A need that would now hide
From the violence inside
A longing since denied
By a cruel, petty lie
And I wonder where you've gone
My Lovely Bit of Song
Where did we go wrong?
What words did we stop on?
Has it really been so long?
Since I stopped and said "Adieu"?
Did you ever like the view?
From that valley hewn straight through
Was it really me and you?
Was I really so untrue?
But I guess I must be true
Life's loves, there are so few
And sorrow doth ensue
So I admit defeat
My suffering, I repeat
For even if we meet
My Muse, you shall retreat
From such a fool as I
Who stopped one day and thought
While gazing up into the sky
And shooting star I caught
With its brightness in my eye
That none behold deny
An age of evil, wrought
Truth they did belie
What a joy 'twould be To Die...

Author's Note

This was an exorcise to get my creative juices flowing. Writer's block can be such a pain.

Reviews

[KJ Heier]

I love this. I find the subject of the poem to be original, and it could have more than one interpretation. Is the writer expressing their frustration with writer's block? (you said so in your note but it's an interesting piece because it could have another meaning), or is the poet speaking about a person who was their muse but died by some tragedy? I enjoyed it, it reminds me of how I feel when I have no muse for what feels much like an eternity. Your rhyme scheme is catchy.

[Lyn Anderson]

I do like this one. Writer's block sucks. Sometimes, you just have to put something out there just to unblock it. I get that, and I think this is a great way to do it. One question, it is t'would isn't it? Those damned apostrophes ...

[Caradoc]

Writer's block does suck, but every so often it affords something enjoyable after breaking through it.

Damned apostrophes indeed. However, after double checking via a Google search and looking at Cambridge Dictionaries Online, the spelling appears to be correct, with the apostrophe before the word itself.

Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[Lyn Anderson]

That is a trifle odd. But c'est la vie en Anglais

[quinfinn]

question....and i am serious. are you a published writer? because you should be. i mean, i have visited your pages and am always stunned by the immense quality of your writes. jeezaloo, this is so good! whew!

[Caradoc]

Umm...well...no not really. I'd like to be, my novels at least. Working on creating a series, though none of it is on the Cafe.

I wouldn't mind getting my poetry published though.

Thanks for the compliment though. That's a huge boost to my self-esteem, especially coming from you.

[Fréyjä Helv..]

Writers block are often hard to overcome.. But this is well written. For someone suffering in WB, i presume you're works are far better if well thought out. I really enjoyed this one...

[Caradoc]

I'd like to think so. Thank you for the kind words. So glad you liked it.

[shivohumsohum]

rise up and salute the man that you represent at identity's door
find your shorty fire burnin on the dance floor
chuck those grenades outta your pocket lest they implode before

you can run away
have another hilariously huckleberry hillbilly holiday

[Caradoc]

Thanks for the advice about the grenades. :)

[shivohumsohum]

yes thats right

[SnowCat]

You never cease to amaze me Cara. You have changed your style a little since we last talked but in a good way, I like it. I have to be honest though, I had to read it more than once to make sure that I captured the very essence of your poem and I enjoyed that quite a lot :D I understand what you wanted to say seeing as I too have been without a muse for so long...
I'm happy you 'got your creative juices flowing' and can't wait to read more of your work!

Anna