Lonely Angel

The moment we met, I knew I was doomed

Time stood still, and the world raced by

I'd fallen again, this time for you

I trembled when I saw the look in your eye

Ensnared by your black magic spell

I tumbled down, from heavens high

On eyes like night my wayward mind did dwell

Orbs that burned with a passionate fire

They haunted my dreams, as from grace I fell

Many a friend and foe did I name a liar

Denying all of what they told me

But within this angel's heart beats desire

Trapped in the web of your sorcery

I fail to grasp the brightest jewel

I'm consumed by sorrow and misery

In exile, I long for my soul's renewal

Wings torn and scarred, heart lost and charred

A cry echoes from inside a Lonely Angel

Author's Note

Part one of the Angel Saga, which I began in junior high and continued throughout high school.

It is unedited.

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

The first and last stanzas evoked such strong contrasting emotions (in me)..... A sighing contented, caressed hopeless romantic that longs for that sentiment reflected in another with the first one.... A scarred, hurting, longing, heart that is barely beating yet trying to find its way again forever hoping to find the other half in the last..... I know I relate to both sides of that....(I may have only fell once but it was so profound scars so deep, yet I dare to dream)....Beautifully written...

[Caradoc]

What I find interesting about a lot of my older poems is that they're almost prophetic. I was writing about heartache and pain that I only had the barest echo of knowledge about. This piece was about a minor crush, and yet...back then it was intense for me. Now...what I've felt is so much more potent and real than the inspiration for Lonely Angel. Reading it tonight, the piece seems to apply very well to the pain I've suffered recently.

Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[AprilRN1210]

The intense hormones that accompany such minor things as younger contribute to that... Then "real life" hits and you really experience true love, pain, loss, betrayal on deeper levels... Very true...

[Belle]

A deep thought from a young soul who've been trapped ( i suppose ) by a captivating woman he desired.
Cara, this is like a travel back to my high school days where I had to play volleyball during intramurals just to fit in the world of the only one who had my heart from my first year til the young man graduated. And I wept most of the time feeling that I had not given back any attention. :)

[Caradoc]

Yea...the girl that inspired this poem never noticed me. A lot of girls never noticed me. It led to a lot of forlorn poems.

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

[Belle]

This is the best in creative people like us, we can turn even the ugliest experience into beautiful piece of art which when we share we can inspire nor teach other about the lesson.

Now, I understood clearly where all your piercing poems came from.

[Pax]

wow... angel saga... looking through your old writes makes a poem more promising....
the lonely angel burns in the halls of loneliness...
a fallen angel, cries its lost...
heartfelt words!

[Caradoc]

Thank you again. This was one of my earliest pieces, back when I was really starting to write and actively seeking the favor of girls.

[Pax]

but i could see you succeeded on your dreams and aspiration... that's great achievement my friend... congrats! and your welcome!

[Caradoc]

Again, thank you. :)

[NA]

This is stunning, it reads perfectly.....wonderful, loved it :)

[Caradoc]

Thank you. I'm glad you found enjoyment in my piece.

[Dewella~Vintella]

Haven't we all felt this way at one point or another in our lives. There is always that one person who totally undos us, and we get lost in who and what they are, forgetting about anything else for a while.

Darkly romantic and wonderfully written, well done.

~Dew

[Caradoc]

I was always very passionate, even when I was twelve. My problem was being in love with the idea of love. I outgrew it, thankfully.

It is always a pleasure and a delight to have you review one of my pieces. Thank you, Dew.

[kublakhan27]

What can I say, the others have already nailed it in their reviews...I'm awestruck by the power of this piece.

[Caradoc]

Thank you.

[quinfinn]

and just how ironic is it, do you think, that i was listening to Santana's "black magic woman" as i began to read this? oh, i know the nuances and the frailties of this situation so well, the bargaining and the denial and the dealing...."when it comes down to dealing friends" (Eagles)...damn! you have freekin nailed it ! awesome write!

[Caradoc]

Thank you my friend.

That is an interesting coincidence and a good song. Although if you think this one is good, I invite you to take a look at my piece, Darkest Eyes. It's similar.

[SyberRose]

I enjoyed this Caradoc...and I liked the form too...it says its unedited but I didnt see where it needs it.:)

[Caradoc]

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this.

When I put unedited, I meant that I wrote this in Junior High in one burst of thought. I didn't play around with words or tinker with it in any way after I was done. I've read that it's recommended to do so, but I've never really liked to do that...