Lonely Angel

The moment we met, I knew I was doomed

Time stood still, and the world raced by

I'd fallen again, this time for you

I trembled when I saw the look in your eye

Ensnared by your black magic spell

I tumbled down, from heavens high

On eyes like night my wayward mind did dwell

Orbs that burned with a passionate fire

They haunted my dreams, as from grace I fell

Many a friend and foe did I name a liar

Denying all of what they told me

But within this angel's heart beats desire

Trapped in the web of your sorcery

I fail to grasp the brightest jewel

I'm consumed by sorrow and misery

In exile, I long for my soul's renewal

Wings torn and scarred, heart lost and charred

A cry echoes from inside a Lonely Angel

Author's Note

Part one of the Angel Saga, which I began in junior high and continued throughout high school.

It is unedited.

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

The first and last stanzas evoked such strong contrasting emotions (in me)..... A sighing contented, caressed hopeless romantic that longs for that sentiment reflected in another with the first one.... A scarred, hurting, longing, heart that is barely beating yet trying to find its way again forever hoping to find the other half in the last..... I know I relate to both sides of that....(I may have only fell once but it was so profound scars so deep, yet I dare to dream)....Beautifully written...

[Caradoc]

What I find interesting about a lot of my older poems is that they're almost prophetic. I was writing about heartache and pain that I only had the barest echo of knowledge about. This piece was about a minor crush, and yet...back then it was intense for me. Now...what I've felt is so much more potent and real than the inspiration for Lonely Angel. Reading it tonight, the piece seems to apply very well to the pain I've suffered recently.

Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[AprilRN1210]

The intense hormones that accompany such minor things as younger contribute to that... Then "real life" hits and you really experience true love, pain, loss, betrayal on deeper levels... Very true...

[Quill~]

Fantastic imagery! It's hard not to get 'ensnared' in the black spell...

[Caradoc]

Indeed. I 'fell' a lot when I was younger. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

[Chidoriflower]

Wonderful. I can picture it in my mind's eye...the angel, the sorrow, the longing, so beautiful. Tragically pretty.

[Aino A Järvinen]

Fantastic. Sounds like the synopsis of one of my books. Graceful and well written.

[Fréyjä Helv..]

Reminded me of the romance fantasy novel Fallen by Lauren Kate. It's pretty mainstream. Heard they were doing a movie about it. This however holds a more sorrowful tone which I like a lot. The imagery, message, and flow, all beautiful. Like this a lot

[Tina Kline]

A very beautiful poem about a very tragic situation. I think this is great!

[Caradoc]

Thank you.

[Tai Ryens]

You mean there's more? That sounds sweetly enticing.~ Do keep me updated
Well done, I thought it had that ethereal atmosphere to it.

[Caradoc]

Indeed there is more. I wrote a series of poems during my younger years that I named the Angel Saga. I had finished it by the end of high school, and only recently I wrote a new piece linked to it. Part two of the saga is already posted. It is called "Fallen Angel", cliched as the name is. :)

Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[Sarah Sopher]

I love the symbolism maintained throughout the piece. The only thing is that the flow seems a little and I mean a very little bit off... But it may just be me lol...but like I said I love the piece and the symbolism!

[Caradoc]

Thank you for reading and reviewing.

Is there a specific place where the flow seems off?

[Mother Maggie]

Exquisitely beautiful written by a soul older than his years.

Bravo

Namaste

[Caradoc]

Thank you.

During those years I always felt like I had more in common with adults than with kids my own age.

[Mother Maggie]

When I had just hit my teens, my big brother BC used to tell me I was 13 going on 30 so I completely understand.

Namaste

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A very thoughful piece that reads very well, a gem!

[Caradoc]

Thank you.