Unnamed

I took a walk along the shore
Years ago amidst the glow
Of a time when tear drops sang
A symphony of grief and pain
'Twas my own that I knew then
An ache of love and misplaced need
Bitter nights and starless days
Screaming heart and voices, quiet
Void of all the things I could not speak
Broken rhymes still lacking reason
A saddened sound I dared not name

In all the days gone since that spell
I yearned to bleed on something new
And not the knife within my soul
To shatter the glass but one last time
Gain freedom from my boundless cage
A house of blood and gilded sand

Yet here am I, fool, once again
Lost inside a poor boy's dreams
Smiling at faces I will never see
Leering back and taunting
They mock me as I fade
Consumed by shameful desire
Sleeping arms that reach out to hold
Though the midnight knows I'll never fill
Only another kind of Hell to feel

Mere moments more, how can I bear
To linger on until the last
A drop of darkness kissed by light
Longing lips, still moistened, damp
Always waiting to be touched
But knowing destiny cannot be changed

Doomed to wander, slipping, gone
Cursed for something, never mine
A flickering fire that just won't die
A need to rhyme that can't be done
Haunting eyes beneath the moon
This bitter soul that torments my heart
Starving for things I can never have...

And...              

...you...

A void within myself
That I can't change
A pain inside
That's still...

                                   ...Unnamed...

Author's Note

As the poem says...a pain inside I do not know, something which I cannot name...I tried to express it...somehow...

Reviews

[Palm Tree]

Twas my I own that I knew then...was the "I" in that line intentional?

[Caradoc]

Whoa, where the hell did that come from? Amazing that you spotted it. Thanks!

[Palm Tree]

You're welcome :-)

[Caradoc]

You're the best.

[Palm Tree]

Fo sho my homie!

[Caradoc]

Omg, lol. You goober. :P

[Palm Tree]

Takes a goober to know a goober.

[Palm Tree]

I'm a goofy goober yea! You're a goofy goober yea! We're all goofy goobers yea! Goofy goofy goober goobers YEA!!!!!

[Caradoc]

LMFAO wow...

[Palm Tree]

Spongebob is my idol...

[s y e]

You write in such depth. It's a powerful read that again, speaks volumes. Well done!

~ Noodle.

[Caradoc]

Thank you.

[TL Boehm]

when tear drops sang
A symphony of grief and pain
'Twas my I own that I knew then
An ache of love and misplaced need
Bitter nights and starless days
Screaming heart and voices, quiet
Void of all the things I could not speak
Broken rhymes still lacking reason

So much depth in this piece. I found it resonant and I found myself scooting closer to the screen as if that might help me peer through the melancholy to the heart of the poem. There is a tangible ache in the play of words here. They are both lovely and sad. Love deferred makes the heart toxic ground.

[Caradoc]

Indeed it does.

One must try hard to hold on to the purity of the feelings rather than let the lack of reciprocation poison the relationship. As the saying goes; "If you love someone, let them go..."

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I'm pleased that my piece could hold you rapt for even a moment.

Be well.

-Caradoc

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A solitary piece that reads well and takes the reader to depts unkown to your readers, well done, good read.

[Caradoc]

Thank you.

[NA]

You write with such depth I am..... in awe.....brilliant read :)

[Caradoc]

Thank you very much for your kind words.

[Rogue]

This went very deep and resonates with both your feelings and thoughts there.

"A drop of darkness kissed by light
Longing lips, still moistened, damp
Always waiting to be touched"

These are exceptional lines in this wonderful piece. :)

[Caradoc]

Thank you for the compliments. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.

[Tai Ryens]

I do rather appreciate that you do not outright state the void is some sort of emptiness, as many people do, and instead leave it to us (the readers) to disambiguate the real meaning of the term. Another aspect I did adore was the chosen beginning to the poem, the treading through memories and seeing that the same void existed, unacknowledged, but existing nonetheless; and I faintly grasp at the nature of your wording, as if you desperately sought for a memory free of the void, yet you realize that such a moment exists no longer. As well as that, I loved the attempt to predict the future despite the fact that you do know ~parts of it, but you cannot predict what exactly will happen; it foreshadows even more grief, sadly.
I'm running words here; forgive me. Quite confusing, I must admit, though I did have a blast attempting to interpret it.

[Caradoc]

Well I'm glad you had fun, my friend. I always enjoy it when I find one of your reviews on something of mine. Thanks for stopping by.

[Cool Handless Luke]

you did well. the pain and confusion and raw emotion came out very poignantly and clearly. a finely crafted piece of work.

[Caradoc]

Thank you. And by the way, awesome name and avatar. I actually have the Luke Skywalker figure in your pic.

[Cool Handless Luke]

I do too. Sits on my computer! Thanks!

[Pax]

Starving for things I can never have...

~ OH, how much emotion you had poured in this, i can't even guess ~ it flow so much that i felt every line in how deep it sips through the readers...

"A void within myself"

~ I'm trying to find it myself, the empty void, the hallows of the heart ~
~ so amazingly expressed! ~

[Caradoc]

Thank you for the wonderful review. I'm glad it spoke to something in you.