Painted Echoes, Scents of Sin

Painted Echoes, Scents of Sin

A Poem by Caradoc
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Perhaps now finished in my mind...

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I sent her a letter every day, penned by the heart and inked with a soul.
Such whispered words of echoes none recall,
Fading into time where love can't remain.
A drifting symphony of nowhere, never pain.

I shall not want, I cannot want,
The cold in her,
Where the darkness feels so wrong.
Inked in blood,
There the nothingness belongs.

I paint her a dream which words cannot say, brush strokes of steel and colored coal.
These vistas of fantasy and pigments befall,
Wounding the wings of doves that lie,
'Neath bronze hued canopy of shifting, weeping sky.

I shall not write, I should not write,
My love to her,
Where eternity mirrors fair a sight.
Caught in time,
There, the forgotten ones tonight.

I composed her a song even silence cannot slay, tunes of thought and bells only memory can toll.
The sirens sing and beckoning enthrall,
All fears and hopes and more,
Calling you and calling you to softest, ebony shore.

I shall not have, I cannot have,
My only, her,
Where signs of shadows lair.
Lost and cold,
There that golden tower stair.

I sent her a letter every day, bled now a heart and dead black the soul.
Clutch blistered lips that miseries nigh did maul,
Fading with the shine where love did die within.
A failed gift of Painted Echoes, Scents of Sin.

© 2014 Caradoc


Author's Note

Caradoc
Inspired by the poem "A Letter Every Day" by Dewella~Vintella and myself, Caradoc.

For anyone that wishes to read the piece that inspired this. Enjoy.

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Vinny%20Rune/773454/

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This was fantastic, Cara! With reading the first line I knew where the base of this came from, but you took it to a whole new level. I remember when we first did A Letter Every Day, reading this is like reading it older, more mature brother.

Its amazing, to sit a read something that we wrote in the past years, and compare it to something we now have written. Maybe you dont see it yourself, but you, as well as your writing, has grown. ^^ Its amazing. And not to be too cocky, but knowing that I helped inspire something like this in even the smallest way slaps a cheesy grin on my face.

I honestly dont have words on how much I love this piece, the emotion, the flow. And the story it tells with each passing line. Perfect.

~Dew

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Caradoc

12 Years Ago

The lines wouldn't leave me be after we created Song of Sadness. It reminded me of A Letter Every Da.. read more



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Fine write, like the original structure with the complementary verses and the good imagery, you did very well here.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Caradoc

12 Years Ago

Thank you very much for the read and review. I'm glad you liked it. May you have a wonderful day.
This is an excellent read and write. The feel of reading this with ink still wet after dipping a quill into the ink of your soul.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Caradoc

12 Years Ago

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this piece. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Pax
this is so beautiful! an absolute pleasure to read. a feeling of love, sadness and lost, mixed together perfectly.
Great work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Pax

12 Years Ago

some past sticks to the heart remains as a memory. maybe the challenge was writing it differently an.. read more
Caradoc

12 Years Ago

You see much.

If you have any enemies, which I'm sure someone with your skill and talen.. read more
Pax

12 Years Ago

:) not so much, just following the thoughts like reading between the lines. thanks
This is so lovely , delicate to be read and savoured
Beautiful

Posted 12 Years Ago


Caradoc

12 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the read and review.
I think this poem is my favorite one of yours now :) Different from your usual styles. I haven't read the poem that this is inspired by yet. But I am assuming its written in the same style?

Posted 12 Years Ago


Caradoc

12 Years Ago

Very close yes. I just expanded upon some of the things from that poem. Please do read A Letter Ever.. read more
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Mia
This is just magical! I could read this poem a thousand times and then some more! I can't quote my favourite lines because your entire poem would be included. The longing is so evident and I love the way you're fighting that longing.
"I shall not write, I should not write,
My love to her,"
So powerful! I love this, all of it!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Caradoc

12 Years Ago

Would you believe me if I said I wasn't actually feeling the emotions evident in this piece when I w.. read more
Mia

12 Years Ago

That's almost unbelievable! I would love to be able to do that, especially with my stories...if I'm .. read more
This was fantastic, Cara! With reading the first line I knew where the base of this came from, but you took it to a whole new level. I remember when we first did A Letter Every Day, reading this is like reading it older, more mature brother.

Its amazing, to sit a read something that we wrote in the past years, and compare it to something we now have written. Maybe you dont see it yourself, but you, as well as your writing, has grown. ^^ Its amazing. And not to be too cocky, but knowing that I helped inspire something like this in even the smallest way slaps a cheesy grin on my face.

I honestly dont have words on how much I love this piece, the emotion, the flow. And the story it tells with each passing line. Perfect.

~Dew

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Caradoc

12 Years Ago

The lines wouldn't leave me be after we created Song of Sadness. It reminded me of A Letter Every Da.. read more
I couldn't help but feel a varying range of emotions; from nostalgia to depression, regret to reminiscing, love to heartbreak, just simply a lovely twist of poetic plot. I am not exactly sure what portrait you've attempted to paint with words here, but the last symphony written by a musician comes to mind once I had focused enough to grasp the concept a bit. For instance, say, my future wife (may or may not be nonexistent, depending on if I even have a future of course) was a talented musician who had took her own life. Had I not discovered the last music sheet sheet composed by her before the cursed day, I possibly could have moved on without an inkle of a stain of her in my past. However, upon discovery, I held onto it as if it defined my existence; as it slowly defined my existence . . .
Astounding. My apologies for having rambled on.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Caradoc

12 Years Ago

No need to apologize. I too am a victim of a rambling commentary more often than I would want. Thank.. read more
The poem is amazing. I had to read again. I like the feel of regret and desire in the sames poem. Love can blind us and leave us with hope. I like the use of writing to her to strengthen the purpose of the poem. I like the strong ending to the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Caradoc

12 Years Ago

Thank you very much. This one was very enjoyable to write. I've never done a rhyme scheme like the o.. read more
Mia

12 Years Ago

That's almost unbelievable! I would love to be able to do that, especially with my stories...if I'm .. read more

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