Fever-Dreams

Nightmare after cracking my skull.

Fever-dreams

As I, through fever-dreams, did stumble..

The sky was burning and earthquakes rumbled

Monsters of every shape and kind

Invaded the wastelands of my mind

 

 

Gorgon staring and banshees screaming

And all around me spirits were streaming

Angelic corpses lined my dismal path

Like a heavenly war's strange aftermath

 

 

From a forest of plastic Christmas trees

Canned laughter wafted on a fetid breeze

At me, reflective eyes were gazing

Hungry demons' stares with hatred blazing

 

 

On a tar-black mammoth, a cyclops rode

Straight at me the angry giants strode

Gripped tight by the fear of being thrashed

From my dark and narrow path I dashed

 

 

In the hollowed eye of a dragon skull

I found refuge, and my horror dulled

My afflicted soul began to relax

Out I peeked from my bony old shack

 

 

And somehow the sun eclipsed the moon

And the horizon turned a dark maroon

Like paint in blood the clouds were swirling

And in the distance tornadoes whirling

 

 

From the scorched earth rose a golden snake

He spoke my name and I began to shake

I struggled hard not to lose my breath

I knew I was in the presence of Death

 

 

"I've come for your soul," the serpent said.

Then he seemed to smile, and his eyes burned red

My heart felt as buoyant as frozen lead

My entire existence infused with dread

 

 

I surveyed my self and found no regret

Still I could not believe my fate was set

I said to the serpent", I'm not dead yet!"

I woke crying…in a cold pool of sweat.

 

Reviews

[Lynx]

This is really, seriously great. It's the kind of poem that could be so wonderfully awesome it could be published on it's own. This was awesome, and I really love the way you rhyme the words. Most of the poems these days don't really rhyme much, not that I'm complaining but sometimes rhyming poems can flow much better, and a few here and there of the classic rhyming poetry is really wonderful.

And yeah, all of us have nightmares, hehe. xD

[sheerpoetry]

i feel that it is unfair for me to review your work when its your type of talent that i wish to posess. i feel like i will learn alot from just reading your writing

[the wretched]

i love the imagry your piece gives of the creepy landscape and horrendous beasts. it's often hard to form such a picturesque description in a poetic medium, and you've done a wonderful job, kudos!

[Kevin Vorshak]

Well said, Captain Ugly! I really enjoyed the tempo of your poem and the imagry very vivid. I found myself smiling as I finished it. A really fun read, thanks for sharing.

[East of Eden]

The rhythm of this piece is great it flows and builds to the final line. 'Fever-dreams' also sums up night terrors much more adeptly than the word 'nightmare' in my mind so maybe it will be in the next edition of the oxford dictionary! great write, truly horrific.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Vivid imagery! I love it!

Sal