vengeance via shotgun

I wrote this at work, one day I came in for a meeting. We are giving "sand dollars" which we can use to buy things, I was going to buy something to help kill some time. When I went to get them, someone had stolen them. This pissed me off pre

playing
deadly
games
stealing
from
me

Honestly
you
have
offended
me

I
know
not
who
you
are,
if
I
did
you'd
be
dead

You
stumbled
it
seems,
pawned
it
all
off
thought
you
were
safe

Shotgun
blast
to
the
face

© 2007 Captain Savage
 

Reviews

[Jimbo Tee!]

This is really good dude. I like the ending. Powerful. This one is more subtle than the shot gun blast to the face.

Man, that last stanza works on my brain folds a little.

That polite society line is great too.

This is the battle of animal urges and civilized actions. We all face it.

Great write.

[E.L.C.]

Hmmm very interesting, I like the utterly simplistic set up of this piece, it really works. I think poetry can be too wordy sometimes, but this is stripped to the very bone and still rings so clearly in one's head. Nice piece I like it :)