Been

It's been three long

months since I've seen

your being. Your face

looks tan...have you

been in the February

sun?

 

Your eyes seem to

glisten in the school's

flourecent lights, and

You haven't grown since

I've seen you last.

 

You told me you liked

my hugs. Well I like it

when you push me up

against the wall. It's

just been three very

long months.

Reviews

[MAC]

Dan gave the perfect review. Excellent poem. The revealing of your needs and wants in a very subtle way makes this piece cleverly written.

[Flow]

"have you

been in the February

sun?"

I hope this takes place in a place that has sun all year round.. I like this one cute and direct...

The emotions are expressed well, and have the ability to stick on to the reader. This was written well.

[Ralphy]

Oh girl you keep my mind guessing and I'm still guessing. My mind spun out of control when a vision of lust entered the picture, and a passionate woman of young decided she wanted 3 months back for his absence. She conjured her memories of ole to reminisce about the past in hopes it was every bit as bliss if not more succulent then before�or more then just a hug...nice write

[Dan Bullock]

I like the questioning in the opening, then innocence seeps into the equation and then this biting the lip-even- moment that rips it all apart, but in a good way in my book, very interesting.