The Plan

The Plan

A Chapter by Cameron Griffith
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Wills life changes drastically when his best friends try to kill him.

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What a week...what a f*****g week. It's funny how this little world works...people say it works in mysterious ways but f**k that, the world works in a way that it will try to f**k you over. The way the world has works has me headed to death row. One moment I’m with my four pals drinking beer, stuffing our fowl mouths with burgers, smoking a little weed and just shooting the s**t; but Christ...now I'm packing all my s**t in a hurry because all my buds are coming to take kill me, full on murder. Bunch of pricks...oh you are curious as to where this is going or how I managed to piss all my pals off to the point they want to murder me. 
You see we were all at the bar talking about our new girlfriends and our same boring old wives, sports, porn, you know guy s**t, anyways one of the guys...ah Jesus what's his name Peter? James? Goddamnit the fat red head...oh Louis, Louis decided to break the news that he filed for bankruptcy the other day (what a lousy way to getting out of paying for your own drink) but us being pals we ask him how he managed dig himself that much into debt, and how we can help the poor b*****d. After Louis brought out that news the other dipshits talk about their lack of income too, yeah sure I threw in my complaints too, who wouldn't with this economy. After our therapy session at the bar we all went home and thought and later that night one of the guys Peter, called me up and told me to meet up at In-N-Out burger tomorrow at 1. 
I showed up to the burger joint and met the fellas there, Peter started to talk. 
"Now guys, I don't want to force you into this, but thinking about last night and our entire financial crisis, I think we should...rob a bank."


© 2014 Cameron Griffith


Author's Note

Cameron Griffith
Hope you guys enjoy!

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I want to read more but I've got to go out. Damn it. I will definitely come back and read the next chapter. I can't think of a better compliment than that. I'm hooked.

Now the bad news---
fowl mouths or foul mouths? Do there swear a lot or are they chicken related?
"coming to take kill me" ????
If Peter is to be a main character then you could describe him a bit here to save time later. something like 'you know Peter, lippy guy works in insurance' or some such s**t.

Honestly a few typos and being picky - good stuff

Posted 9 Years Ago


Well if that's not a hook then I'm not me. That can definitely be argued but that is a hook and I'm going on to the next chapter. Nice job. Nice job! :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


Hey buddy, were you angry while writing this???

Posted 10 Years Ago


Cameron Griffith

10 Years Ago

No haha I wasnt, I wanted to create a character that was a smart aleck, cocky, pompous dude and didn.. read more
Afraa

10 Years Ago

I thought the profanities made it all the more entertaining. I'm telling myself this guy knows how t.. read more
It's cool...haha maybe...you could make peter do just a little more convincing on getting the other guys to agree to rob a bank! :/ but I'd definitely buy the book if i read these two chapters. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Interesting. Sounds like it is leading into something exciting.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on December 7, 2014
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