Deathwish

Ever get the feeling... when it seemed like you were all alone and
Everyone ditched you, it was clear that you were abandoned.

Yes, people made it quite clear... that you were nothing but invisible.
You cried silently and your sobs were barely audible.

I know its been an eternity since you had a genuine smile... on your face.
You've carefully wiped every tear, there's not even a single trace

They see you fake a smile and presume you're 'oh so happy'...
But they don't know that your life is just plain 'crappy'.

You're like a torn book with ragged pages,
A sad song with nothing to say...
Except for a devil's mind... that has most probably gone astray.
Don't need their pseudo-sympathy; and this is what you'd say,
"Grant me a death wish; if you may."

Been down and about; probably cried a river...
Can't take it anymore; might as well pull the trigger.

But dear, don't you even try to make me stay.
Nothing can stop me now; even if you pray.

Now don't pretend as if you don't know
You're the reason I'm this way.
Confront it now. Cause' you made me this way.

I'm like a torn book... with ragged pages.
A sad song with nothing to say...
Except for a devil's mind that has most probably.... gone astray.
Don't need your pseudo-sympathy, better if you go away.
But if you still dare to stay...grant me a death wish; if you may.

Author's Note

This is my very first poem here... please let me know if its any good. Suggestions for improvement are always welcome.
P.S. I'm sorry but I mostly write tragic poems

Reviews

[sonnie ibadah]

"....You're like a torn book with ragged pages,..."
sometimes the people closest to us can be oblivious to our feelings, not becoz we hide it well but becoz it is simple to ignore the pain in our eyes and welcome the smiles in lips.
a very strong and emotional piece, something to relate to. nice work!

[Just Me]

Thank you so much for saying that.... I never really thought that people could like my work. I can't describe how much this all means to me.. just thank you. :)

[sonnie ibadah]

ur work is great, u deserve some credit. ur welcome ;)

[Shaquana Adams]

This is very powerful. Very well penned! ^-^

-QuanaWana

[Just Me]

Thank you so much.... It means a lot. :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is so sad and well portrayed the feelings ricochet of the page.We expect those we love to know when we are sad and sometimes they don't pay enough attention to notice:)

[Just Me]

Thank you for reading and leaving a review... I'm actually kind of new to all this... glad you liked this. :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are most welcome.Keep writing :)

[Thomas Skahill]

For your first poem I think this shows some strong potential. Keeping playing around with rhyming and learning new words and phrases!

[Just Me]

Ahaha.....xD thank you for reading and reviewing. It means a lot.

[New Theory]

Wow, so powerful, and tragic.
You have a way to just take out your emotions and put it on page. Do it, do take out all that was lost, all that was wrong and take it out here, let go.
Some times no one sees how sad a person can be.
But sometimes you have to come out and meet, there is so much more to life.

Cheers, please check some of my works. Hope you like it.
Leave a comment so I know you were there (wink, just kidding.)

Enjoy life, god bless you.

[Just Me]

Thanks a lot for such an amazing review. I really appreciate that you took the time to read my work, even though its from a newbie...haha I read a poem of yours and yes, I left a comment too...:) I'm actually looking forward to read more of your works... god bless you too. :D

[New Theory]

You are welcome :), thanks for reading my poem, "Death" I had written it when I was in school maybe in 10th or 11th.

[Just Me]

You're most welcome...:)