Gasper

Gasper

A Poem by The Poet of Black Wings

Attack.
Violently constricted
By the
Beast.
His face
Parallel.
Jaw open wide.

The creature
Pulls
Air
From my 
Lungs.
Consuming it as
Appetizer. 
Preparing for the main.

I feel impotent,
Weak.
But I
Fight.
Refusing to succumb. 

Put a pen
Through.
Its.
Throat.

The 
Monster is
Afraid of thorns.
It leaves,
But will return.

© 2016 The Poet of Black Wings


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"jaw wide open" instead of "jaw open wide"

it's tastier that way. I swear.

At you...

"As an appetizer" add the "as"... trust me dawg... it's better that way. I promise.

You must fix the ending... this ends in an unsatisfactory way.

Show me some bite, you've promised teeth but all I see is nips...

End with power... furious absolute.. "f**k you! this is my end!"..... in your own words of course.

It can be soft it can be hard but god f*****g damn it make a statement. (fyi... I didn't really like the ending so much)




Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Davidgeo

8 Years Ago

So it must. I look forward to the lessons of language that you teach the English. (FYI - nothing'.. read more
Davidgeo

8 Years Ago

Nope... certainly not here... (fyi- it aint real)
Davidgeo

8 Years Ago

"jaw wide open" is like, 8 times better..



Reviews

"jaw wide open" instead of "jaw open wide"

it's tastier that way. I swear.

At you...

"As an appetizer" add the "as"... trust me dawg... it's better that way. I promise.

You must fix the ending... this ends in an unsatisfactory way.

Show me some bite, you've promised teeth but all I see is nips...

End with power... furious absolute.. "f**k you! this is my end!"..... in your own words of course.

It can be soft it can be hard but god f*****g damn it make a statement. (fyi... I didn't really like the ending so much)




Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Davidgeo

8 Years Ago

So it must. I look forward to the lessons of language that you teach the English. (FYI - nothing'.. read more
Davidgeo

8 Years Ago

Nope... certainly not here... (fyi- it aint real)
Davidgeo

8 Years Ago

"jaw wide open" is like, 8 times better..

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Added on April 16, 2016
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Tags: monster, creature, gasp, air, violence, asthma, sleep, suffocation, sleep apnea

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The Poet of Black Wings
The Poet of Black Wings

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