Beautifully Broken

Take away my sight,

 but don't touch my heart.

Let me stay here,

 alone in the dark.

In the daylight, 

my heart will only die.

In sorrow, 

 I find my strength to fly.

Let me sail away on the raging ocean;

or dance in the rain with the trees.

Here, I am safe.

 Here, I am free.

Just let me be

Beautifully Broken.

Reviews

[Michael (Letters and Li..]

Nice poem, Feather. I have found it to be true that some people just like to stay broken. Sometimes it is easier to be sad because we have just become too used to it. Sometimes it's an effort to be happy. But it is always worth the effort.

Thank you for sharing your excellent poetry!

[Calissa Knox]

It's wonderful to get such an encouraging review from such a great writer. Thank you!

[zainul]

I can appreciate the beauty of broken.
It is so nicely written by your pen.

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you, Zainul, for your kind words!

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
You may love to read my comments on your photos.
Enjoy your day!

[Calissa Knox]

I just read them. Very nice of you to comment on my photos; I appreciate your kindness and encouragement. Have a great day!

[zainul]

Thank you Feather for the heartfelt compliments.
The photos were really amazing.
I loved the photo with piano too.
Are you an expert on piano?

[Calissa Knox]

You're very welcome! Music is my passion, but I consider myself a work in progress.

[zainul]

Thanks for the lovely words.
I hope you will shine some day in this arena too.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Wow its a very nice poem....hats off :))

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you very much. :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

You are welcome...sometimes when we lose someone close to our heart its hard to live without that person...i wish god would had never made broke ups and only love couples

[Calissa Knox]

Often, going through break-ups or other struggles helps us write poetry, create art, or find a passion to help others through their struggles. It is hard, but it's how we learn to become better. Even when we don't realize it, there's beauty in everything.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

sometimes the beauty in someones smile is always better than the tears in silence.......Missing her is that part of my life which i cant forget or even cant think all time....but yes loves teaches everything to live with heart and to live with a lost heart...

[Calissa Knox]

I'm very sorry for your loss.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

please don't be....God bless you!

[Calissa Knox]

You too, Skyfall!

[Sibusiso Kotela]

This is a beautiful piece:-)

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you, Sibusiso! :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

It is those emotional scares that often bring us unexpected beauty to our soul. A nice little inspirational poem.

[Calissa Knox]

I agree. We often have to go through a storm to appreciate the sun; or get lost in the dark to find the light. Thanks for the review!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Was my pleasure :)

[Justin]

that was really awesome :) it has alot of emotion in it, the way it is set up it awesome :) keep it up :)

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you, Justin! Keep up your writing, too. :)

[Miranda Richard]

I love the last stanza, very powerful. My only advice is not to add too much. n your second paragraph I feel that your syllables are too much. But hey, it's just my opinion. Wonderful job :)

[Calissa Knox]

I appreciate your helpful opinion. Thanks for the review! :)

[A. Amos]

I absolutely love those verses,  very relateable! amazingly written and well expressed. 

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece.

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my dear

[Patricia Williams]

You have outdone yourself, Feather! This is so beautiful.

If I guess right, this is about how sometime being "fixed" isn't necessarily the best route; how sometimes we need to be alone with our thoughts and feelings in order to find out who we really are (take away the crutches, so to speak).

The last stanza is somewhat haunting though. The speaker wants to stay broken forever. It seems like there are people wanting to help them, but they're in too deep.

"Let me sail away on the raging ocean,
the ocean of my emotion."
I'm not really feeling these lines, especially "emotion." I don't know, the rhyme interrupts the flow I guess (in my opinion).

I can't wait to read more! :)
~Patricia

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you very much for the helpful, encouraging review, Patricia! :)

[Erik Daniel]

This is beautiful Feather! Well done!

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you, Erik!