Soon

You stare at the television

to block out the pain inside.

You listen

to ignore the voices in your mind.

Soon, 

the fog will surround you.

Soon,

you'll be standing at the foot of reality.

Soon,

you'll have to embark on your journey...

Because soon,

 

it will all be over. 

                                         

Reviews

[Russ]

I wanted to be the first to review one of your poems, I think being in a different time zone probably helped with this. This poem really hit me, I like the start, it almost calmed me and
than bang, it felt like a mind spiraling out of control. By the end I had almost lost my breath
I read this many times, each time leaving me with the same feeling. Very good.

[Calissa Knox]

I'm glad you could feel this piece. Thank you very much for your review!

[Hobbit]

Very good. You get a strong feeling from this poem.

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you!

[Laura Harrison]

I like how the last line showed hope :) nothing really does last forever, not even depression!

[Calissa Knox]

Yes, that is very true. And, even when there is depression, the greatest inspiration can come from it. Even the hurt can be turned into something beautiful. :) Thank you for the review!

[Laura Harrison]

Exactly :) you're welcome

[bobc]

FD...very nice this. You caught a moment in a life here and how television has a kind of narcotic quality...bobc

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this.

[Avery]

I really like how you set the scene and managed to fit so much into such a short poem and have it read so well. Nicely done :)

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you very much!

[Lourisa]

A very touching poem! Feather. I can identify with it so easily. You remind people that there is hope, and we need that because we can't see it for ourselves. Thank you.

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you for your kind words, Lourisa! I'm very glad this poem could inspire you.

[Neon]

Yeh .. nice move... I liked the theme. Your going cool, keep writing.

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you very much, Neon! :)

[Neon]

My pleasure as always dear, Dawny .. yer this poem touched me because i felt that it's a very realistic write. You know what, your starting touching mah heart :)

[Calissa Knox]

That''s very nice of you to say, Neon. :) Your words touch my heart, too. :)

[Chris]

The tolling of the bells is a well themed work.

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you very much!

[Sarmelendez]

wow i can feel the heart break in this its suttle but raw and fresh

[Calissa Knox]

I'm glad you could feel it. Thanks for reading! :)

[Moon]

This is a beautifully dark piece which would work as part of a song, too. I like the shorter lines at the beginning, which add to the unfolding drama; and then BAM!! suddenly it's all over.

[Calissa Knox]

An interesting idea, I might try to put parts of it into a song. Thank you for your inspiring review, Moon!

[Calissa Knox]

This one touched me deeply my friend, I see here a real-life scene, in front of my eyes, of a sweet person, who suffers from a mental disease.... and fights it. (there are typical things, you write of, I can recognize someone close to me did too)... you did captured that somehow scary moment here very well)... but there is hope, and there is light, for this person, and your selfless personality talked for him/her, to help, somehow... I felt that.

Plus I can hear your melody back into your words.... fantastic piece.

- Elisa x

[Calissa Knox]

Yes, you felt what I was trying to portray in this piece very well. :) It is about someone who suffers from a mental disease. I made this in hopes of inspiring someone else, and myself, to embark on the greater journey of life, to leave the pain of the past, and bitterness behind.
Your words are so encouraging! It's wonderful to get a review from you, Elisa. :) Thank you very much for your review, and encouraging words!

Good early morning from here dear, you're so welcome, (this was a real heart felt write) that I felt... and keep on penning, you have a talent... :) come back soon for more xo happy sleep in a while.

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you, Elisa! Good morning to you, too. It's night here in Washington. :)

Thank you a lot, yes, we are shift-switchers he he... have to do some duty's today, then I try to come over.... good night sweetie!

[Calissa Knox]

Good night, Elisa! Hope to talk to you again soon. :)

Me too! sleep well dear Feather... make some lovely musical notes in your dreams. :) we talk soon xx