Alone

Rain began to fall and grey clouds swallowed up the moon.  Shadows fell on her path and there was complete darkness.  She ran until she could go no further, she stumbled to the ground.  She couldn't see through the overwhelming darkness.  Tears of loneliness were mixed with the harsh rain falling on her face.  She reached out her hand, hoping someone would take it... No one ever did.  She called out for help... No one ever came.  The echoes of her screaming  became her only friend.  She screamed until her voice was gone.  She was so weak, she could barely move.  She had tried everything to make someone understand.  No one wanted to understand.  She took her last breath, in the darkness, Alone.

Reviews

[Calissa Knox]

Those grey clouds, are the veil of the moon, and they pass by, and go appart.... very beautiful expression, I liked that... and those tears of heaven on her face, that makes the piece, more heavier, and real... the grief is felt here. (how beautiful).

"The echoes of her screaming became her only friend" aah, I recognize here so much....
Your pen is brilliant, and it shows, how deep you go in art... truly splendid.

"and then Alone"
I could feel this...
Yet there is much strength...

- Elisa

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you for your very kind and encouraging review!

I wrote this because I wanted to portray how it feels to be alone. I wanted to portray how it feels when everyone around her doesn't understand that by sitting alone, and walking with her head down, she's actually crying out for a friend. She's just to afraid to be the first one to reach out. Some people end up on that road at the end of their lives, alone, just because no one ever took the time to say, "I'm here for you".

Anyways, thank you again for your review. I truly appreciate your encouragement, and inspiration!

Thank you so much for explaining the piece as you saw it, and wrote it.... yes, I think that's strong of you, to empathize yourself in her persona, and be selfless enough to still write without connecting, many of my pieces are about loneliness, and this grief, there is beauty in lonelyness though, (but that's me)... I'm selective (became selective in the world). And follow my own voice, that's what you will feel through my writings.... back to this artful piece, you have a way with words, that touches.... (at least me). I'm so ever happy, you noticed me tonight, so I am be able to read your artworks..... Very welcome you are, I do appreciate you too. xx

[Calissa Knox]

I definitely agree that there is a beauty in loneliness, and I think there is even a beauty in hurt and pain. Without those deep emotions, there would be little, or no inspiration for creativity. For many of us, artwork is something used to express our pain, and inspire others to overcome. Without the loneliness and pain, there would be no need for triumph, and no need to create something beautiful and profound. Thank you again, and I'm very glad we could connect today as well. It's been great talking with you, and reading the beautiful artwork you've created. But, I'll let you get some sleep now. :)

Yes, exactly, I think to feel it, and go rock bottom, once in a while, makes it art... it's how we (our brain works). We are a rare type to the mundane world, but the mundane world, just follows only the mass.... I think to ever listen to the heart, and feelings, is what art brings, preceiving, is art... and you do that very well... it was my pleasure tonight, and I will be back as soon as I can, for you, my sweet new friend. Sleep well too in a while, and thanks for all! :)))

[Calissa Knox]

You're welcome, and thanks to you, too. I'm glad we're friends. Sleep well. :)

[Child of God]

This is very powerful and grabs you from the start, great job

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you, Ryan!

[Child of God]

You're welcome lol

[James Huston]

made me keep reading until the end. very hopeless, but related able. i like it and the deepness involved.

[Calissa Knox]

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I wrote it from experience, but also to inspire people to reach out to those appear hurt, different, or alone. No one's story should have to end that way.

[James Huston]

well it came out very good. I agree 100%, everyone needs help at some point with something, just have to reach out and do it.

[Calissa Knox]

Thank you! Yes, very true.

[zainul]

Very sad and tragic.
Sometimes loneliness is hell.

[Calissa Knox]

Yes. Loneliness is always hell.

[zainul]

I love your frank opinion.:)