HAPPY

This poem is now a phoney. It may be a good right but its not true anymore.

Iv had a turning point in my life!

Most my senior year has been rotten.

Nothing seemed to go right and

my love life seemed to be getting worse by the minute.

One day, someone came in my life.

He told me i was pretty, funny, and cool to be around.

He is amazing!

He makes me smile, laugh, and make me feel good about myself.

We mayhave hard times and get in really big fights,

but you know what?

Im not giving up on him no matter how bad or how much we fight.

Im not going to give up on him just because I cry most nights.

Iv given up to much and it has gotten me no where.  
Word of advice to all,

DONT GIVE UP ON SOMEONE OR SOMETHING YOU WANT.

Author's Note

Ignore grammer please! None of this rhyms and its really random and jumbbled. Thanks for taking time to read this!

Reviews

[Tai Chi Italy]

Caitie, I am very happy you have found someone to make you smile, but if he also makes you cry more than smile, it is better to give up on him than live your so young life in misery, he is a part of your journey, just be you and flexible, enjoy the good times but DO NOT put up with any s**t, no one has the right to make you unhappy. NO ONE. Keep writing and keep positive, oh and keep up your studies at school....you have a good life ahead of you and qualifications are the start of it. Smiling at you, Tai,

[E. M. Murren]

All of my works are stream of consciousness, so I read for content more than rhyme and meter. This is heart felt. That is the important part. A really fine write. I must say, though, that there are times to give up... generally it involves abuse. We can always love someone, but there are times when we just can't live with them. I really like this work, though. It speaks of devotion which is the most important part of any love. Well done.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

yay for being happy!! i look forward to having that myself too, one day :)

[April Child]

Strong feelings and strong words. It's good advice but sometimes you have to know when to give up. Nice poem.

[Caitbabie008]

Thanks for the all the reviews!

[H. A. M.]

I like this. Weither it's true now or not you felt that emotion and got it down on paper. I hope at the time of this review you still feel happy.
good venting.

[Emily B]

Aw, there's world enough and time. Remember that there's not a man in the world that will make you happy. That comes from within first. Wishing you the best for the rest of your year.

[The Outlaws' Song]

This has such an amazingly honest message.it is written with such intense sincerity. i love the piece of advice.
thanks for sharing.

[John Stussy]

this piece can give hope to many who read it. it might not be true anymore for you, but the fact that you felt this way should give you hope that someone else can make you feel even more than that. keep your chin up.

[ELii]

sometimes letting go gives you the true answers you seek. Where one thing ends, somethign else begins. i love jumbled thoughts. Usually i get answers from my random writings. good luck.

[HoWiE]

Hey there Cait, this reminds me a little of the moral aspect of my story 'A Funny Thing Happened That Resulted In Me Drinking Heavily For A While...' and I think it's an important message that it is important to not give up on someone - of course it does depend on whether that person is good for you and is doing you harm or not. Either way phoney or not, this came across well and carries a strong message. Thanks for posting and good luck ;-) Howie